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The Amy Dilemma
This new story is in fact a continuation of "Joe's Dilemma" by Dru-- a fun, clever short he published back in the fall. I found Dru's story to be thought-provoking: it raised some interesting themes about both parenthood and civic responsibility. I used it as a foundation on which to experiment with a tale that was more character-driven than DDI. I also experimented with telling this story entirely from the perspective of the men, as is done in Kiraling (although while Kiraling uses first person, mine uses third person).
Dru and I have decided to name the entire series "The Amy Dilemma". And for consistency, Dru has agreed to retitle his original piece from "Joe's Dilemma" to "The Amy Dilemma - Chapter 1".
I'm telling you about these upcoming stories ahead of time for two reasons. First, in the spirit of "ticker coordination", know that I plan to publish this in five daily installments beginning on Wed 6/11 and ending Sun 6/15. For those of you who plan to publish something in the next two weeks and want some significant time on the ticker, please take note of this. If you would like me to reconsider my timing, please send me a PM and we will figure it out.
Secondly, if you are a follower of Dru's writing or mine, I encourage you to re-read Dru's piece before my follow-on pieces are published. Again, I found it to be fun, clever, and even a bit thought-provoking! It is available here: www.superwomenmania.com/index.php?option...s-dilemma&Itemid=372
Again, please give a re-read to Dru's very worthy piece. More to follow on Wednesday!
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circes_cup wrote: After completing DDI, despite my best intentions, I kept writing. Over the next week, I will be posting a new story in five chapters.
This new story is in fact a continuation of "Joe's Dilemma" by Dru-- a fun, clever short he published back in the fall. I found Dru's story to be thought-provoking: it raised some interesting themes about both parenthood and civic responsibility. I used it as a foundation on which to experiment with a tale that was more character-driven than DDI. I also experimented with telling this story entirely from the perspective of the men, as is done in Kiraling (although while Kiraling uses first person, mine uses third person).
Dru and I have decided to name the entire series "The Amy Dilemma". And for consistency, Dru has agreed to retitle his original piece from "Joe's Dilemma" to "The Amy Dilemma - Chapter 1".
I'm telling you about these upcoming stories ahead of time for two reasons. First, in the spirit of "ticker coordination", know that I plan to publish this in five daily installments beginning on Wed 6/11 and ending Sun 6/15. For those of you who plan to publish something in the next two weeks and want some significant time on the ticker, please take note of this. If you would like me to reconsider my timing, please send me a PM and we will figure it out.
Secondly, if you are a follower of Dru's writing or mine, I encourage you to re-read Dru's piece before my follow-on pieces are published. Again, I found it to be fun, clever, and even a bit thought-provoking! It is available here: www.superwomenmania.com/index.php?option...s-dilemma&Itemid=372
Again, please give a re-read to Dru's very worthy piece. More to follow on Wednesday!
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I could have spent some more time refining this, but I ultimately decided to go ahead and, well.... uh.... pull the trigger.
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Thank you also to DRU for laying the foundation for this writing project in his Chapter 1. It's a fun read and should definitely get a look before you read any of mine.
If you like what you're reading, please say something. As Dru pointed out only days ago, us authors are not ominicient. But we do find positive commentary-- when it's honest-- to be very motivational.
Chapter 5 was uploaded about 10 hours ago. It will post when somebody gets to it.
Chapters 6-7 may have a to come in a single clump. I want to get the entire story fully posted by the end of the weekend, as I originally promised.
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I've uploaded Chapters 6 and 7, which I imagine will post shortly. These Chapters conclude the series.
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This felt much more of a peice then deep down inside-felt more like a single novella in seven parts-which is a good thing, a begging middle and twists you fit in a kind of action plot to it, which worked well enough for what it was trying. more then a lot of the stories on the site, it felt like a story you could have put into a movie and it been a film.
And in genre that the relationship between teenage daughters and fathers can be ....complex is a word that one can be used(ichy is another), i liked how you handled it. It reminded me of the recent movie Drive Angry 3D which wasn't the greatest movie in the world, but did a good job of the relationship between Nic Cage and Amber Heard, which acknowledged that in most movies that they would be love interests, but there its a father daughter relationship without either character being celibate. Joes Dillemia was about a father daughters bond. Amys is about a very different one I am not sure the connection between them is better in reflection.
Something to be proud of. I know you say that you want to take time off from writing which is understandable. Deep Down Inside was a monster. but if you can write tight little stories like this, you have something really wonderful. The stuff you do well few better in this genre can do.
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Very well done. Only thing to add maybe would be some manips of the action.
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I have some question though, about Amy physique. Can you give us some details about her (here it's ok, unless you plan to write about her on future chapters)? Height, weight, size of her arms, legs maybe (flex, non flex), etc. I dream of a chapter where some scientist take this kind of measure on her...
I think you guys should send your story for drawing, it would be so nice to have this in a comic format...
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You're welcome!rueda09 wrote: Guys, thanks for this great story.
No, for the foreseeable future, this is as far as I plan to take it. Who knows, someday I might go back to it. But there are some other story lines with which I wanted to experiment first.rueda09 wrote: Do you plan to write more than 7 chapter?
I purposely left much of that to the reader's imagination.rueda09 wrote: I have some question though, about Amy physique. Can you give us some details about her (here it's ok, unless you plan to write about her on future chapters)? Height, weight, size of her arms, legs maybe (flex, non flex), etc.
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For those of you who like scavenger hunts (and are up for reading or re-reading the story), here's a little challenge: Amy Dilemma contains hidden allusions to two other SWM stories, written by authors other than me. So far, nobody has pointed out these connections. I suspect this is because the connections are either A. obvious or B. as yet undiscovered. So, going with B for a moment, the first person who identifies the two stories referenced in Amy Dilemma gets.....
... well, nothing. Or maybe you get bragging rights for your level of SWM literacy. Anyways, happy hunting.
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Both Amy and Dave are extremely interesting and very 'human' characters who are very believable. They are both good people have been thrown together into a situation far beyond their experience, and are just trying to do the best they can. You don't see at lot of father/daughter relationships in superwoman stories, and most of them tend to be very unpleasant. However this story was a refreshing example of a loving and responsible relationship. I particularly loved how the story kept jumping from superhuman displays of power to ordinary teenage problems, emphasising that for all her abilities Amy is still just a 15 year old girl. Her final conversation with Dave was beautifully done, and showed how important love and support is to even the strongest person.
I have got some constructive criticism to add as well, mainly thing I'd have liked to see. I think it is a bit of a shame that neither Joe nor West appear after the first chapter, in particular it would be good to see how Amy reacts to seeing her father again. Having her point out that Dave has done more for her in a few weeks than Joe did in 15 years, and that while she could kill him effortlessly he is now so far beneath her as to be irreverent would be a fitting punishment. I'm also slightly surprised that the government didn't seem to make much of an effort to control Amy, Dave did mention it a little in chapter 3 but nothing after that. It might have been good to at least state that Amy had forced the authorities to let her stay with Dave. I would also have liked to hear a little more about the New Utopia, what least what some of their objectives are for example. Finally, it would have liked to see Amy going all out at least once, even during the battle to protect the president she only used a faction of her total power. I would have loved to see her decide to try lifting one of these navy destroyers for example. But I suppose the great thing about how this story ended is that there's plenty of scope for sequels, spin off and fan fiction.
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Note the Dru's Oh No Sally often steers clear of the wanton destruction stuff and is a fun read.The Highlander wrote: I was rather worried when I heard you were starting work on this story, given the setup and the style of most of Dru's stories I was expecting little more than brutal destruction.
Thank you very much! It means a great deal not only to get the positive comment, but to know why you liked it. Thanks again.The Highlander wrote: ... I have been pleasantly surprised and extremely impressed with the result.
All of these would have been worthy angles to explore. If I only had more time! Who knows, if I get enough requests for it, I might someday try my hand at a sequel.The Highlander wrote: I have got some constructive criticism ... neither Joe nor West appear after the first chapter, in particular it would be good to see how Amy reacts to seeing her father again ... the government didn't seem to make much of an effort to control Amy ... would also have liked to hear a little more about the New Utopia ... would have liked to see Amy going all out at least once.
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I do hope you make a sequel out of this. This series is already a great series. How would a sequel be? It would lead to more greater series. If you are planning a sequel, I say GO FOR IT.
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