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Gangster story idea

19 Jul 2009 01:05 #16179 by Spulo
Gangster story idea was created by Spulo
Vague idea, won't probably ever get around to doing anything with it...

Classic 1930's Chicago gangster-type, one of the most feared ever, suddenly finds all his various criminal activites being thwarted by a mysterious costumed young woman with incredible superpowers - who of course turns out to be his empty-headed gum-chewing 'dumb broad' girlfriend.

I just have visions of the final scene, where the gangster goes back to his base/hideout with his empire crumbling around him after so many defeats. His girl is sitting at the desk in his office, just lighting up a big cigar so that her head is angled downwards and he can't see her face over the brim of her hat.

Eventually she looks up at him slowly, and after a moment's confusion ("it's that strange superwoman but why is she wearing my girlfriend's clo - oh, shit...") he realises what's been going on. His newest and greatest enemy has been right beside him all along, been in on the planning of all his schemes - and he hasn't always treated her anywhere near decently. He'd always thought she was so stupid and treated her as such, and now as he realises that was all an act he feels something he's not felt since he was a kid - fear. He's seen this girl in action, knows what she can do - and knows she has a very personal score to settle with him.

She puts the cigar in her mouth, her hands behind her head and leans back in the chair before swinging her legs up onto his desk - with such force that it collapses instantly. Apparently unconcerned, she simply floats into the air, still in the same position.

And then - well, then it depends if she's a heroine bringing down his evil empire once and for all, or (more likely) a bad supergirl looking to take over?

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19 Jul 2009 03:54 #16181 by inactive
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Nice idea. I like the idea of a wise gal cutting a swathe through the old-school mob.

"You guys must think you're a bunch of big shots with those tommy guns. Why don't you try and teach me a lesson?"

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19 Jul 2009 09:12 #16185 by Woodclaw
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Nice idea Spulo, I can see a good potential in it. And I can't help but thinking about Dick Tracy rogue gallery as a major source of inspiration for this.

And then - well, then it depends if she's a heroine bringing down his evil empire once and for all, or (more likely) a bad supergirl looking to take over?


Well she can easily be both, a story with more than one ending, at certain point of the scene the narration stopped and the readed have to choose which final he enjoys more.

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