Not the One: Susan's army

conceptfan wrote: Three very enjoyable scenes there, Dru, My fave bits were:

Warning: Spoiler!

Itsumi and the giant straw (awesome power). Itsumi and the elevated motorway relocation, (really well written, I could picture it perfectly). Sun-Hee's teasing (and the idea that her orgasms are much more powerful than several co-ordinated weapons of mass destruction) Top prize goes to Tammi and the bullets (absolutely loved the way you wrote that section. Tammy's total dominance and the way it turned her on were great.) The depictions of the bullets hitting her were brilliant.

Keep it coming! I'm really enjoying this series.

I'm really glad you liked the bullets. That's AUGoose earning a credit right there, because I went back and edited those descriptions in after watching this video he showed me:



Everyone writing about bullets hitting stuff should watch that footage. Around 6:30 are the some particularly relevant examples, but it is worth watching the whole thing.

I hope you enjoy the rest of what's Susan and her army are going to get up to...

papayoya1 wrote:

Dru1076 wrote: I've been off preparing my workshop entry...but I've got my draft done and thought I might take a little timeout to check up on Susan's soldiers...

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I really enjoyed it! I love the differences between the girls and the way they use their newfound and practically unlimited power.

It sure is fun to play with such different characters. Glad you're enjoying it mate. I'm certainly very much enjoying your own stories.

I neglected to mention I uploaded two new chapters. Tammy shows Normie the new house, Liz has a chat with Itsumu, and Susan prepares for her journey to visit the Lords of Light.

Find the new chapters here:

dru1076.deviantart.com/art/Not-the-One-P...-Origin-VI-741555932

dru1076.deviantart.com/art/Not-the-One-P...Origin-VII-742601132

Dru1076 wrote: I neglected to mention I uploaded two new chapters. Tammy shows Normie the new house, Liz has a chat with Itsumu, and Susan prepares for her journey to visit the Lords of Light.

Find the new chapters here:

dru1076.deviantart.com/art/Not-the-One-P...-Origin-VI-741555932

dru1076.deviantart.com/art/Not-the-One-P...Origin-VII-742601132

Hopefully soon in our library as well.