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Unfinished Story - "Aten" - Chapter 1
17 Dec 2022 18:23 #76139
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OVERVIEW - Attached is a 32 page unfinished story (a complete first chapter). Premise is that thieves accept a job that is more than what they bargained for.
** VIOLENCE : None. Tense moments but can't qualify as violence.
** NUDITY : Yes. Enough for it to be considered R-rated (old-styled R-rated, not modern R-rated films which is just PG-13 with more graphic violence). There are some graphic descriptions but no explicit details.
** SEX : None.
** OBSCENITIES : Yes. Enough so that you shouldn't read this as a bedtime story to your kids (or anyone else's kids, for that matter).
** ADULT THEMES : Yes. Spoilers?
NOTES: I was surprised by how easy it was to write. Some "back-filling" but only to amp up the suspense. It is an introductory chapter so, a lot of establishing text to (hopefully) set up a lot more action for future chapters (including the next one). There's a little bit of timeline shifting but, hopefully, readers will catch on that not everything happens in exact order and I tried to make that clear in the writing. I learned / re-learned a lot about
along the way which gave me some really great ideas (a lot of them didn't make it into this chapter) for the overall story line.
AND... I figured that I would issue a challenge to the readers here. If this chapter receives 10 or more "Thank You"s, I will write the second chapter and that one has some action planned for it. And if I get 15 or more "Thank You"s, I'll provide a 'commentary' to this chapter that reveals some significant "what might have been"s that didn't get written.
Enjoy the holidays!
** VIOLENCE : None. Tense moments but can't qualify as violence.
** NUDITY : Yes. Enough for it to be considered R-rated (old-styled R-rated, not modern R-rated films which is just PG-13 with more graphic violence). There are some graphic descriptions but no explicit details.
** SEX : None.
** OBSCENITIES : Yes. Enough so that you shouldn't read this as a bedtime story to your kids (or anyone else's kids, for that matter).
** ADULT THEMES : Yes. Spoilers?
Warning: Spoiler!
A semi-graphic but non-violent death, mentions of drug usage, a joke about sex and robbing a place, in general.
NOTES: I was surprised by how easy it was to write. Some "back-filling" but only to amp up the suspense. It is an introductory chapter so, a lot of establishing text to (hopefully) set up a lot more action for future chapters (including the next one). There's a little bit of timeline shifting but, hopefully, readers will catch on that not everything happens in exact order and I tried to make that clear in the writing. I learned / re-learned a lot about
Warning: Spoiler!
ancient Egypt
AND... I figured that I would issue a challenge to the readers here. If this chapter receives 10 or more "Thank You"s, I will write the second chapter and that one has some action planned for it. And if I get 15 or more "Thank You"s, I'll provide a 'commentary' to this chapter that reveals some significant "what might have been"s that didn't get written.
Enjoy the holidays!
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17 Dec 2022 18:57 #76140
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Good Stuff! I found when I was writing Enerize! or smaller segments on here, it is good to be able to go back and re-write some chapters as the story and your thoughts on the characters develop.
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18 Dec 2022 18:06 #76143
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18 Dec 2022 20:35 #76144
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I have a notoriously bad habit of doing what you have written (going back and re-writing sections) which I've termed "back-filling" for my own purposes. I try very hard not to that because, once I start performing that task, I tend to not stop.
However, part of the fun of writing is to paint yourself out of the corner that you've inadvertently painted yourself into... So it's a bit of "push-and-pull" when it comes to what you go back and re-edit (besides grammar, typos, things of that nature) storyline elements.
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Thanks for the feedback.Good Stuff! I found when I was writing Enerize! or smaller segments on here, it is good to be able to go back and re-write some chapters as the story and your thoughts on the characters develop.
I have a notoriously bad habit of doing what you have written (going back and re-writing sections) which I've termed "back-filling" for my own purposes. I try very hard not to that because, once I start performing that task, I tend to not stop.
However, part of the fun of writing is to paint yourself out of the corner that you've inadvertently painted yourself into... So it's a bit of "push-and-pull" when it comes to what you go back and re-edit (besides grammar, typos, things of that nature) storyline elements.
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18 Dec 2022 20:38 #76145
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The attachment is there, it is underneath the topic post. There is a "paper" icon (a rectangle that looks as though a corner has been folded inward) and a button beside that icon.
I hope that helps in finding the attachment.
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Thank you for the question.Don’t see the attachment?
The attachment is there, it is underneath the topic post. There is a "paper" icon (a rectangle that looks as though a corner has been folded inward) and a button beside that icon.
I hope that helps in finding the attachment.
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