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Kiraling

26 Feb 2014 03:37 - 26 Mar 2014 20:48 #35634 by anonxyzus
Kiraling was created by anonxyzus
I've just posted two chapters from my first ever story, Kiraling.

Kiraling is based on Shadar's Aurora Universe and borrows several of his characters.

The story is told from the point of view of a wounded warrior whose life becomes entwined with that of super women from the stars. It is told in the first person, and explores the human/super woman relationship form the point of view of the human.
Thanks to Shadar for his advice and counsel, and for editing help.
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26 Feb 2014 08:40 #35635 by Woodclaw
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And the story is now online. I hope to see more from you soon.

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18 Mar 2014 22:27 #35843 by anonxyzus
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In order to avoid crowding out other stories and taking up too much space on the SWM home page Kiraling chapters are now being organized into "parts". Each part will contain one or more chapters that relate to each other, more or less.

This is being done to be more respectful of Home page space usage, but does not change the story. That's right: Kiraling is now less filling but still tastes great! (That is supposed to be a joke.)

Part 1 contains chapters 1 - 3
Part 2 contains chapters 4 - 5
Part 3 contains chapters 6 - 9
Part 5 contains chapter 13
Part 6 will contain chapters 14 - 18
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26 Mar 2014 21:55 #35941 by anonxyzus
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I've just posted part 6 of Kiraling, chapters 14 - 18. In that section I introduced a new character named Gloria.

The story, Kiraling, had been in the back of my head and my imagination for some time before I started writing it down. As I completed each chapter or section I'd send it off to Shadar who, it turns out, is a pretty good mentor. When he read the chapters with the character Gloria, he asked me if I'd like him to write her back story. At first I declined, saying I'd rather do that myself. But over the course of time I started to think it might be a good idea, and fun, to let Shadar do that. You can find the result in Shadar's story, "Gloria", which went up yesterday.

My suggestion is that you read "Gloria" before reading part 6 of Kiraling.
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27 Mar 2014 03:22 #35943 by ong76win2
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anonxyzus wrote: I've just posted part 6 of Kiraling, chapters 14 - 18. In that section I introduced a new character named Gloria.

The story, Kiraling, had been in the back of my head and my imagination for some time before I started writing it down. As I completed each chapter or section I'd send it off to Shadar who, it turns out, is a pretty good mentor. When he read the chapters with the character Gloria, he asked me if I'd like him to write her back story. At first I declined, saying I'd rather do that myself. But over the course of time I started to think it might be a good idea, and fun, to let Shadar do that. You can find the result in Shadar's story, "Gloria", which went up yesterday.

My suggestion is that you read "Gloria" before reading part 6 of Kiraling.


Will be waiting for it to be posted. As of now, it is not yet posted here. Gloria will be in kiraling series? Wow! Hope she would be helping Joe and the other velorians.....

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27 Mar 2014 13:23 - 27 Mar 2014 13:27 #35946 by brantley
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It's up this morning. But no sign of "Gloria" in Shadar's library as of 9:25 a.m. EDT.

--Brantley
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27 Mar 2014 13:58 #35947 by njae
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brantley wrote: It's up this morning. But no sign of "Gloria" in Shadar's library as of 9:25 a.m. EDT.

--Brantley


Gloria has been up here in the library since yesterday.

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27 Mar 2014 16:18 #35948 by brantley
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Found it through a title search. It just hadn't shown up in his library.

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09 May 2014 06:59 #36415 by anonxyzus
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I've submitted part 8 of Kiraling. That part takes me to the end of what I have written. There will be more, it's in my head, but I've started a new job and I don't know when I'll have the quality time I need to continue the story. But the time will come, and I will continue it.

There is something about this site's editor that doesn't like what I write. Nearly every time I post a story a paragraph gets dropped, and I have to jump through hoops to get it to post and stay there. Well, this last time, I ran out of hoops, so I put a note in the story where the dropped paragraph is supposed to be. So I'm posting it here:

Xara said, “No, that’s a planet. It will stay up there.” And then went on to explain to the kids what shooting stars are. One of the little ones asked what a planet is and she told them, and then described Jupiter for them. It sounded to me like an eyewitness description.
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09 May 2014 07:59 #36416 by Woodclaw
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anonxyzus wrote: I've submitted part 8 of Kiraling. That part takes me to the end of what I have written. There will be more, it's in my head, but I've started a new job and I don't know when I'll have the quality time I need to continue the story. But the time will come, and I will continue it.

There is something about this site's editor that doesn't like what I write. Nearly every time I post a story a paragraph gets dropped, and I have to jump through hoops to get it to post and stay there. Well, this last time, I ran out of hoops, so I put a note in the story where the dropped paragraph is supposed to be. So I'm posting it here:

Xara said, “No, that’s a planet. It will stay up there.” And then went on to explain to the kids what shooting stars are. One of the little ones asked what a planet is and she told them, and then described Jupiter for them. It sounded to me like an eyewitness description.


Ops, sorry for not putting it online sooner, I was busy with another project that swayed my attetion.
I'll investigate the paragraph issue, but it sound really strange.
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09 May 2014 10:54 #36417 by brantley
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That missing paragraph turned out not to be missing.

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09 May 2014 12:01 #36419 by Woodclaw
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brantley wrote: That missing paragraph turned out not to be missing.

--Brantley


Who are you gonna call? :whistle:

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09 May 2014 23:18 #36423 by brantley
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It's a terrific story, anyway!

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11 May 2014 23:30 #36435 by anonxyzus
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I think Woodclaw must have fixed it.

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12 May 2014 00:22 #36437 by Woodclaw
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anonxyzus wrote: I think Woodclaw must have fixed it.


It comes with the job description, I think.

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13 May 2014 01:14 #36441 by circes_cup
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Speaking of things that are missing, we're getting that weird malfunction in the Comments section again. Comments at the end of 08 posted by me and Brantley have disappeared, and other comments have emerge to take their place. Part of the Arion conspiracy, maybe? :S

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13 May 2014 02:10 #36442 by fats
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hi, I’m aware of the problem, the comments are there but are in the wrong section of the DB, i need to work out how and why that is happening.

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29 May 2014 18:51 - 29 May 2014 19:11 #36661 by ong76win2
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Sorry. Double post.
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29 May 2014 18:57 - 29 May 2014 19:14 #36662 by ong76win2
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This is really a great series. I do hope this will be continued. I don't want to see it disappear and become forgotten.
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29 May 2014 20:37 #36663 by brantley
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Ditto.

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21 Jun 2014 00:58 - 21 Jun 2014 01:07 #36891 by ong76win2
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This is one of the great series I would love to see continued. It has great plot and story line with great description like as if I am watching a movie. Hope this is not forgotten by the author.
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21 Jun 2014 03:33 #36892 by shadar
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ong76win2 wrote: This is one of the great series I would love to see continued. It has great plot and story line with great description like as if I am watching a movie. Hope this is not forgotten by the author.


I know the author intends to continue it, but he's bit busy with other (non-writing) stuff at the moment.

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21 Jun 2014 07:17 #36896 by anonxyzus
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It isn't forgotten, and there is more, in my head. But I've changed jobs recently and with some other family things going on I haven't had time to write. But eventually I will, and the story will continue.
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22 Jun 2014 10:24 #36935 by ong76win2
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anonxyzus wrote: It isn't forgotten, and there is more, in my head. But I've changed jobs recently and with some other family things going on I haven't had time to write. But eventually I will, and the story will continue.


Thank you for the reply. :-)

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12 Aug 2014 19:02 #37722 by ong76win2
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Hello. Hope this series would be continued. I really love this series. I really am looking forward to read what will happen next. I hope I can motivate the author to continue his work. Hate to see this left hanging and forgotten.

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