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Transformatrix 4000 -- Comments and Suggestions

31 Dec 2007 14:21 #11286 by Berkhart
I've always wanted to see a super powered Hooters girl, so I really enjoyed the latest addition. Great stuff as always from you Argonaut!

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01 Jan 2008 04:50 #11297 by argonaut
Thanks for the props, Berkhart -- and back at you! I'm hoping for more Ayami, more Ultra Gail, and more Mary Sue in 2008.

The third and final installment of the Caitlin chapter is for you, big guy! I hope you find it "delightfully tacky, yet unrefined."

Happy New Year!!!

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01 Jan 2008 16:02 #11298 by Berkhart
That was a pretty awesome addition. It should go without saying that you're one of the best at this.

Now if only Caitlin was...evil (sorry, couldn't help myself!)

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01 Jan 2008 16:29 #11300 by argonaut

That was a pretty awesome addition. It should go without saying that you're one of the best at this.


Well, it often does go without saying -- so I appreciate the feedback!

Now if only Caitlin was...evil (sorry, couldn't help myself!)


She may be a sweetheart, but she slaps two scumbags around and trashes an office!

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02 Jan 2008 00:49 #11309 by argonaut
Once again, I've posted 2/3 of a three-part chapter. Look for part 3 later tonight or tomorrow.

Not much ubergirl action in this one, but I hope my readers find it amusing.

Super-Lana:

www.superwomenmania.com/imagebank/bank/sginc/lana [2].jpg

And if you'd like to see more of her in that costume, check out the Silver Age ubergirl classic "The Battle Between Super-Lois and Super-Lana" at Ace's Comics Place (in our ImageBank).

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02 Jan 2008 02:49 #11311 by sgfan05
Now that was funny.

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02 Jan 2008 04:06 #11313 by argonaut
Thank you, sgfan05! It's nice to be getting some feedback for my recent additions to the story. The third and final part of the Super-Lana story is
for you. Enjoy!

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02 Jan 2008 08:48 #11315 by Lastleaf
It was funny and refreshing, they had super-lana there

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02 Jan 2008 17:42 #11318 by sgfan05
Hey anyone have thoughts as to how the ubergirl showdown should go?

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03 Jan 2008 00:33 #11319 by argonaut

Hey anyone have thoughts as to how the ubergirl showdown should go?


If you do, turn them into a chapter for the story!

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03 Jan 2008 18:38 #11323 by Woodclaw
I'm going to post the rest of my entry on Saturday or Sunday.

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03 Jan 2008 19:33 #11324 by argonaut
Looking forward to it, Anon! I'm glad to see someone inject some ethnic diversity into our cast of transformees. (I don't feel knowledgable enough to do that credibly myself.) Thanks for helping to make our story interactive!

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03 Jan 2008 21:40 #11325 by Spulo
Don't really wanna spoil everyone's fun and be a dictator or anything, but...can I be honest?

Can I? Please? Really don't mean anything evil by it, it's just a thought...

Okay...we've got two T4000 story threads going. The main one, and a 'Tales from' one, for all the little one-off stories and scenes...and at the moment it seems like a lot of things that should be in the Tales one are going in the main one.

Really really don't want to spoil the flow, but...that's just the way it feels to me at the mo... :oops:

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03 Jan 2008 21:42 #11326 by sgfan05

Don't really wanna spoil everyone's fun and be a dictator or anything, but...can I be honest?

Can I? Please? Really don't mean anything evil by it, it's just a thought...

Okay...we've got two T4000 story threads going. The main one, and a 'Tales from' one, for all the little one-off stories and scenes...and at the moment it seems like a lot of things that should be in the Tales one are going in the main one.

Really really don't want to spoil the flow, but...that's just the way it feels to me at the mo... :oops:


I think since they've been done to rally the troops for the fight, they're okay. Borderline but still within the story.

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03 Jan 2008 22:40 #11329 by argonaut

Don't really wanna spoil everyone's fun and be a dictator or anything, but...can I be honest?

Can I? Please? Really don't mean anything evil by it, it's just a thought...

Okay...we've got two T4000 story threads going. The main one, and a 'Tales from' one, for all the little one-off stories and scenes...and at the moment it seems like a lot of things that should be in the Tales one are going in the main one.

Really really don't want to spoil the flow, but...that's just the way it feels to me at the mo... :oops:


Since I'm the main culprit ...

1. No need to apologize for expressing an opinion on a FORUM. That's what it's for.

2. Point taken. In retrospect, I think I let the Regina sub-plot take up too much of the story. Once I wrapped that up -- finally! -- I planned to write five or six BRIEF vignettes, each showing a transformee responding to the "call to arms." But the Caitlin and Super-Lana stories grew beyond that. Yeah, the "Tales" thread -- which I myself launched -- might have been a better venue for them. Hindsight's 20-20, as they say.

3. As sgfan points out, each of my stories ends with its main character flying off to "join the posse." I presume that's what Anon has in mind for the story he's adding. So they're not entirely independent of the main story-line.

4. Bottom line, for me -- people are showing an interest in the story and contributing to it. Props to them!

5. Maybe it's time for someone to get the showdown under way ...

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04 Jan 2008 14:29 #11339 by Woodclaw

3. As sgfan points out, each of my stories ends with its main character flying off to "join the posse." I presume that's what Anon has in mind for the story he's adding. So they're not entirely independent of the main story-line.



Just two small notes.

1) The entry I posted yesterday was originally intended for the 'Tales' thread (with a different ending), but I wasn't able to figure out a good continuation, so I modified it.

2) I love the idea of cross-over, so I jumped on when I saw the possibility of a meeting.

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04 Jan 2008 18:16 #11346 by argonaut
Has it been established where the big showdown will be taking place?

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04 Jan 2008 18:51 #11348 by Woodclaw
Just two little things

It looks like a rough work so she chose a pair of tattered jeans, an old white T-shirt (with the X-men logo emblazoned over her left breast) and a pair of old sneakers.


First I'm a little ashamed of the bold part of the sentence, I know that is probably out of place but when I wrote it out it looks quite amusing.

When they are about three hundred feets from the streets Amber asks "I have a little question. Who is this Akira Kurosawa you were talking about?"


Second, this part was not intended to show Amber as stupid. But in my opinion it's quite difficult that Kurosawa is part of her cultural luggage. (During the last year my family hosted a girl that was roughly of the same age and education of Amber so I base my observation on that experience)

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05 Jan 2008 21:14 #11371 by sgfan05

Has it been established where the big showdown will be taking place?


I had Kara and her gals heading towards the Northeast since that's where we last saw Tiff, but otherwise no one has put a location yet.

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27 Jan 2008 21:05 #11536 by brantley
Well, anyone who thinks things have gottrn too tangled up here could try his hand at the long-abandoned WHEN WE DEAD AWAKEN....

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