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19 Mar 2018 03:42 - 19 Mar 2018 03:43 #58867 by shadar
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I've posted a new story called StarTroopers in two parts, a Prologue and Episode One.

Part meteor story, part Starship Troopers influenced and all Uber powerful. A story about how Earth faces the threat of spacefaring intelligent race of insects, bugs, who view us as nothing more than tasty morsels best eaten fresh while screaming.

And the bugs are winning.

But someone out there is on our side. A message is intercepted by SETI that was sent more than two thousand years ago that tells us how to fight back.

I wrote most of this back in 2012, but I'm returning to a whole bunch of aborted stories, reviving the best of them to share and hopefully enjoy.

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19 Mar 2018 16:26 #58878 by ong76win2
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Great story. Hope it continues. Be waiting for more!

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19 Mar 2018 17:00 #58879 by shadar
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ong76win2 wrote: Great story. Hope it continues. Be waiting for more!


Already writing episode 2.

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19 Mar 2018 19:33 #58881 by Monty
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This looks relly good and very promising. A great concept there. I must admit, I was half-wxpecting a super Denise Richards (oh, yeah) when I started reading. Perhaps she could turn out to be captain of the ship?

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19 Mar 2018 19:55 #58882 by shadar
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Monty wrote: This looks relly good and very promising. A great concept there. I must admit, I was half-wxpecting a super Denise Richards (oh, yeah) when I started reading. Perhaps she could turn out to be captain of the ship?


I’d forgotten about Denise. Always a favorite of mine. I’ll definitely beam a young Denise (or maybe her identical-looking granddaughter) into the story. Tks for suggestion.

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19 Mar 2018 20:26 #58883 by Bolt527
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Just putting in a word for Sheena; hope chapter 2 doesn't slip under the radar.

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19 Mar 2018 21:46 #58888 by shadar
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Bolt527 wrote: Just putting in a word for Sheena; hope chapter 2 doesn't slip under the radar.


Working on both, plus others. Sheena story will just have two parts. Startroopers will have several more.

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20 Mar 2018 13:56 #58911 by TwiceOnThursdays
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I'm so far behind on reading things ....

but I took the time to read StarTroopers last night and I'm really glad I did. ;-)

i love the setup and the world building. I can't wait to get to some of the action against the bugs.

I like the restrictions. The transformation isn't permanent, the women need repeated exposure (and hence swallow some to always keep it on hand). And there is the implication that if it fully wears off, you die.

Add to this the initial "if you look at it you die" part, making it dangerous to even test. It did seem that something extra was going on, as why would someone stare at something so deadly w/o protection ... I surprise that it partially affected her, and that made her drawn to it and "want to see more...".

The aliens left a dangerous gift.

If the genetic tests are open, then I wonder if some enterprising woman (or women) would mount an operation to get some? Imagine if a high ranked politician matched? (I wonder if the exposure de-ages someone?)

I love the character building in Part 1, it'll be interesting to see how this develops.

The images also help set the mood. A nice little spice on top of the words.

So yeah, waiting for more. ;-)
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20 Mar 2018 21:02 #58916 by The Highlander
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I love the new story, interesting premise and some very well done world building. And refreshing to see a man who doesn't just want to hope into bed with the superwoman (and nice touch having the superwomen keeping their sex life secret). Plus I had a chuckle at Amy Lorraine's name, I can't imagine how you came up with that one!

With an uncooperative Russian on the loos I think it's time for the UK to have some superwomen of its own to protect it. May I suggest these two beauties (even if one of them is technically Scottish).




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20 Mar 2018 22:10 #58918 by shadar
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Oh, yes... definitely some good choices. Maybe in Episode 3. Love redheads.

By the way, I'm preparing to upload Episode Two now. Look for it in a few minutes.

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20 Mar 2018 22:51 #58920 by Caylane
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Redheads are indeed the best ;)

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21 Mar 2018 13:21 #58924 by smoki07
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I like the story! Continue plz!
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21 Mar 2018 13:30 #58925 by jumperprime
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I hope a future chapter will give us a glimpse of the political turmoil Ivanka's little rampage is likely to have set off. A Russian Uber not only botches the train-stop test so badly she completely destroyed the train and almost killed the engineers and examiner, she then attempted to murder the examiner and he only survived because she was doing it slowly enough for another Uber to have time to stop her before permanent damage was done. I imagine the organization that oversees the StarTroopers is also rather concerned that Ivanka seems to have no background in law enforcement, military, or medical. Before the disastrous train stop I believe she implied that she was a Lit/History major?
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21 Mar 2018 13:46 #58926 by shadar
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jumperprime wrote: I hope a future chapter will give us a glimpse of the political turmoil Ivanka's little rampage is likely to have set off. A Russian Uber not only botches the train-stop test so badly she completely destroyed the train and almost killed the engineers and examiner, she then attempted to murder the examiner and he only survived because she was doing it slowly enough for another Uber to have time to stop her before permanent damage was done. I imagine the organization that oversees the StarTroopers is also rather concerned that Ivanka seems to have no background in law enforcement, military, or medical. Before the disastrous train stop I believe she implied that she was a Lit/History major?


Even worse, the Russians insist that she’s a part of the first “gunship” we deploy to go after the bugs. The tactical advisor on that ship is John, the examiner she threatened to kill.

High stakes and a tricky bit of politics with John in the middle.

The hotshot pilot of the gunship is named Carmen and she looks astoundingly like Denise Richards. Still working on selecting the rest of the crew... most of them Ubers.

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21 Mar 2018 14:15 #58927 by jumperprime
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shadar wrote: Even worse, the Russians insist that she’s a part of the first “gunship” we deploy to go after the bugs. The tactical advisor on that ship is John, the examiner she threatened to kill.

High stakes and a tricky bit of politics with John in the middle.


Oh, John will NOT be happy about that. He will strongly object to her being one of the engines, citing her complete and total fuckup on the train stop test, he'll probably strongly object to her being on the ship at all citing that and her little attempt to kill him, which likely resulted in a dust up with multiple Ubers beyond the atmosphere. Ivanka is a loose cannon, and while she may be top tier in strength, her control and personality are both gravely lacking.
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22 Mar 2018 21:30 - 22 Mar 2018 21:31 #58938 by shadar
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TwiceOnThursdays wrote: I like the restrictions. The transformation isn't permanent, the women need repeated exposure (and hence swallow some to always keep it on hand). And there is the implication that if it fully wears off, you die.

Add to this the initial "if you look at it you die" part, making it dangerous to even test. It did seem that something extra was going on, as why would someone stare at something so deadly w/o protection ... I surprise that it partially affected her, and that made her drawn to it and "want to see more...".


As far as Amy's daring attempt to stare into the rocks, given everything up to that point said you'd die doing that, I agree that there was a compelling draw that she couldn't resist. BECAUSE she had the right gene combo in her DNA. All by design.

As far as the "(and hence swallow some to always keep it on hand)", that was the way at first, but it had unpleasant limitations in that you had to keep capturing and recycling the bits of crystal. Amy developed a device that holds a tiny bit of crystal and locks it into the cervix, where it's carefully inserted. Installed in that very safe spot (given an invulnerable woman), the crystal can stay indefinitely. (I don't think any Ubers are going to get pregnant, given everything is presumably invulnerable, including their ova.)

In such a way, it's out of the way and securely fixed, and also located close to the core of their body.

Seems like an appropriate place for a superwoman's power to come from, at least to me.

Fast forward from there to Ariel's "healing power" which she channels from the crystal. That works best on men because they have the ability to get at least one part of themselves very close to that bit of crystal to enable the energy flow.

Or course, no one, including Ariel, really knows any more than this about why it works for her. I haven't decided if its a unique skill that she has, or if some other Ubers have it as well.


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22 Mar 2018 21:34 - 22 Mar 2018 21:35 #58939 by jumperprime
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shadar wrote: Or course, no one, including Ariel, really knows any more than this about why it works for her. I haven't decided if its a unique skill that she has, or if some other Ubers have it as well.


That would be rather funny if all the Ubers who can do it think they're the only one who can, and keep it a secret for the same reason Ariel is.
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22 Mar 2018 22:01 #58940 by shadar
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shadar wrote: Or course, no one, including Ariel, really knows any more than this about why it works for her. I haven't decided if its a unique skill that she has, or if some other Ubers have it as well.


That would be rather funny if all the Ubers who can do it think they're the only one who can, and keep it a secret for the same reason Ariel is.


I won't rule that out at this point. I'll have to see how the story unfolds to decide which way makes sense as a plot device.

I will say, that given the Ubers are all drawn from military, police or intel agents at this point (supposedly), which as a group are conservative and serious warrior types, and not porn stars, its unlikely any of them would want to demonstrate it for an audience. Or want to even talk about it at all.

But once in space and dealing with casualties, who knows what we'll discover. I've been leaning toward Ariel being special, but not because I have a specific use for her uniqueness. We'll see what happens when they start taking casualties out in space and away from any help.

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25 Mar 2018 02:00 #58950 by shadar
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I've just uploaded Episode Three. This one is Area51 focused with flying saucers and the whole deal, although it won't be what you expect, I don't think.
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27 Mar 2018 12:43 #58969 by Monty
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Monty wrote: This looks relly good and very promising. A great concept there. I must admit, I was half-wxpecting a super Denise Richards (oh, yeah) when I started reading. Perhaps she could turn out to be captain of the ship?


I’d forgotten about Denise. Always a favorite of mine. I’ll definitely beam a young Denise (or maybe her identical-looking granddaughter) into the story. Tks for suggestion.

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Hi Shadar. I think I may have found the daughter or neice of Denise Richards for your story. The likeness of the pair is extraordinary (and she even has a Super name). I'll try and pm you later with her details to keep her under wraps.

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