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My new story: The Phoenix Initiative

21 Oct 2018 08:42 #61645 by papayoya1
My new story: The Phoenix Initiative was created by papayoya1
I was very happy with how "The Towers' Syndrome", my first superwoman story, was received. As I already mentioned when I posted the last chapter a few weeks ago, I have already started to work in another story. Today I posted the first chapter and the prologue.

I tried to make this new story, titled "The Phoenix Initiative" quite different from Towers in several aspects. The universe set up is different, with super powers mostly focusing on (extremely enhanced) physical strength and abilities. The number of charaters and complexity of the plot lines is also significantly higher. The story will be long (probably longer than Towers when it comes to word count) and I believe that it also will be richer when it comes to plot and character development. 

I hope that you will enjoy it! Please, let me know what you thought, as you did with Towers!
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09 Dec 2018 13:16 - 09 Dec 2018 13:46 #62265 by AuGoose
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A (very) rough draft. Please PM me with guidance on how it can improve. Almost everything can be adjusted! :D

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09 Dec 2018 19:52 #62267 by Woodclaw
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The scale pattern is pretty interesting, although combined with the location it has a bit of an Aquaman vibe.

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10 Dec 2018 01:05 #62269 by AuGoose
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It's a carbon fiber weave -seemed like a good candidate for the gear being produced by the Initiative for the Firebirds when they take the field.

Papayoya has provided some guidance, so future images should be more in line with his vision.

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10 Dec 2018 20:34 #62282 by AuGoose
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Papyoya's been providing references and review for my efforts to model the lovely Phoenix girls. So in the spirit of "aid to the imagination"...

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16 Dec 2018 18:46 #62323 by papayoya1
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The images look fantastic! And they are really, really close to what I had in mind when I created the girls. I'm honored that you found the story inspiring enough to create them. Thanks so much!

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17 Dec 2018 12:49 #62328 by smoki07
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Still no new chapter? You're re-writing ?

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18 Dec 2018 19:55 - 19 Dec 2018 23:49 #62344 by The Highlander
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Reading the descriptions I thought that they would be a good bit bulkier, more of an oversized bodybuilder. 

Also Susan looks so lonely, I just want to give her a big hug!  
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21 Dec 2018 17:30 #62363 by papayoya1
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smoki07 wrote: Still no new chapter? You're re-writing ?


Chapter 5 should be up on Sunday. Hope you'll enjoy it!
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21 Dec 2018 17:31 #62364 by papayoya1
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The Highlander wrote: Reading the descriptions I thought that they would be a good bit bulkier, more of an oversized bodybuilder. 

Also Susan looks so lonely, I just want to give her a big hug!  


Well, they are more fitness model like than oversized bodybuilders, even if the 8' height makes them impressive anyway. As for Susan... good luck if you hug her. Not sure you'd want her to hug you back!

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22 Dec 2018 18:01 #62384 by The Highlander
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papayoya1 wrote:

The Highlander wrote: Reading the descriptions I thought that they would be a good bit bulkier, more of an oversized bodybuilder. 

Also Susan looks so lonely, I just want to give her a big hug!  


Well, they are more fitness model like than oversized bodybuilders, even if the 8' height makes them impressive anyway. As for Susan... good luck if you hug her. Not sure you'd want her to hug you back!


Well maybe not a hug than (since it would not be healthy to frighten or surprise her) but I'd like to at least sit down and talk to her to try to
bring her out of her shell a little and cheer her up.

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11 Jan 2019 22:19 #62583 by smoki07
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AuGoose wrote: Papyoya's been providing references and review for my efforts to model the lovely Phoenix girls. So in the spirit of "aid to the imagination"...

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Is the brunette one Nicole or Nathalie?

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