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LaPorte Caves

27 Mar 2016 15:38 - 17 Apr 2016 23:32 #47002 by fats
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Hi all,

I've created this thread for people to bounce ideas for Circes's Cup for this excellent story series.

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27 Mar 2016 18:02 #47005 by castor
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If your looking for ideas, i think at some point Julia has to come back to the normal world...but it would be intresting if that when she does she is so far gone she doesn't reconize it.
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27 Mar 2016 23:59 #47014 by AuGoose
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Really loved chapter 7. Not just solid characterization but some really fun ideas. Some trials ahead will no doubt gloom things up a bit, but a well played bit of sunny world building.

Looking forward to more.
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28 Mar 2016 15:16 #47018 by jnw550
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Great chapter! The casual way the girls dominate their environment while making it fun is really something I enjoyed. Julia's innocence and delightful wonderment about her new power makes me fall in love with her. I know drama makes a good story, but I'm enjoying the fun while it lasts.

I do love that you let them use their physical dominance in different, more interesting ways other than lifting and bending and bouncing bullets off their tits.

Everyone wants to be a beast, until it's time to do what real beasts do.
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31 Mar 2016 06:59 - 31 Mar 2016 07:06 #47088 by circes_cup
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Thanks, Fats, for starting this thread!

Chapter 08 should go up Thursday night U.S. time.
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castor wrote: If your looking for ideas, i think at some point Julia has to come back to the normal world...but it would be intresting if that when she does she is so far gone she doesn't reconize it.


Yes, this is a great idea. And truth be told, you're not the only person to suggest this. I do expect to get her back to the normal world, but it will be a few chapters yet before I can work that in.
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AuGoose wrote: ... really fun ideas... trials ahead will no doubt gloom things up a bit..


Thanks, AG! That means a lot coming from a writer who has produced a great deal of variety himself. I like the suggestion you offered up in prior chapters about making Julia stand out in this world -- that her foreign-ness somehow contributes to playing a special role in this world. Without giving too much away, keep an eye out for that in later chapters.

And yes, trails are coming, but hopefully they will be fun trials. For you. Not for Howard.
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jnw550 wrote: ... Julia's innocence and delightful wonderment make me fall in love with her...


Thanks! Creating real characters was a priority for me in this story, something that I started to do in The Amy Dilemma and wanted to build upon. I'm hoping that it makes the story more accessible and compelling for the reader.
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jnw550 wrote: ... physical dominance in different, more interesting ways...


I'm glad that you see it that way. I'm hoping people experience the story as something new and different. The genre has been online for perhaps 15 years now, and I think keeping the concepts fresh makes a big difference.
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31 Mar 2016 08:15 #47089 by AuGoose
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I'll keep my eyes peeled :).

I do quietly root for Howard. He's a guy, and he does stupid guy shit, but he's not evil or especially digging a hole or begging for karma to come kick him in the junk. In some ways he's probably the least whipped guy on the planet. I hope he can be a bit special too.

Chapter 8 so soon? I do love when a muse decides to linger :).

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01 Apr 2016 14:43 #47104 by lfan
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Part 8 of this wonderful series has been posted for those of you interested. I've been privvy to the next few chapters as well, and I can only tease everyone by saying it gets better and better!
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01 Apr 2016 23:41 - 02 Apr 2016 00:10 #47121 by circes_cup
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AuGoose wrote: I do quietly root for Howard. He's a guy, and he does stupid guy shit, but he's not evil or especially digging a hole or begging for karma to come kick him in the junk. In some ways he's probably the least whipped guy on the planet. I hope he can be a bit special too.


I appreciate the point, and it's hard to respond very specifically without giving too much of the future plot away. But suffice it to say that, if I had to put this story into a category, I would call it a romance. The story is about how two people struggle through unforeseen obstacles and rediscover each other in the process. Now, that sounds like the inside flap of a cheap greeting card, I know. But two individuals are facing no ordinary obstacles, and it's turning out to be no ordinary struggle, so it's impossible to predict whether they can pull through it together. But with that as the basic architecture of the story, c Howard cannot be a straw man. He'll be just as important to the outcome as Julia will.
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02 Apr 2016 08:02 #47124 by AuGoose
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Shocked, upset, and confused. Angry, but not enraged. He's doing pretty damn good under the circumstances. And Julia's still getting a grip truth be told. The enhanced mental facility is definitely a huge barrier between the sexes. Definitely enjoying it. Its does a surprisingly good job of holding interest with a gentle pace -- usually I'd be waiting for the ninjas to attack, but I'm still riveted by the personal interplay.

Eager for more :).
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02 Apr 2016 12:24 #47125 by lfan
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AuGoose wrote: Shocked, upset, and confused. Angry, but not enraged. He's doing pretty damn good under the circumstances. And Julia's still getting a grip truth be told. The enhanced mental facility is definitely a huge barrier between the sexes. Definitely enjoying it. Its does a surprisingly good job of holding interest with a gentle pace -- usually I'd be waiting for the ninjas to attack, but I'm still riveted by the personal interplay.

Eager for more :).


Totally agree.....Circes and Marknew do the "slow burn" sagas better than almost anyone in this genre. while I don't usually get into "Amazon Tribe" stories, this one has kept my attention and left me wanting more.

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02 Apr 2016 12:56 - 02 Apr 2016 14:39 #47127 by Monty
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Really enjoying this! Especially the latest chapter with the multi-tv channel scene being a laugh out loud moment, and of course the end-scenes with the boulders and poor Howard throwing up all the Nourishment. I'm interested to see where the storyline goes and if Julia needs to keep taking the fruit to sustain her strength.
I've spotted an interesting development but will try pm you rather than hitting a potential spoiler. :)
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03 Apr 2016 00:29 #47139 by RevTekkX
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Hello circes_cup,

I am quite happy to see chapters 7 & 8 added here on SWM.

I was hoping you would forge ahead with the series after the demise of Brawna.org.

lfan's note about yet-to-be released chapters is VERY encouraging!

Thanks for continuing this marvelous work!

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03 Apr 2016 01:05 #47140 by paulwitz
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@RevTekkX, is Brawna.org down and out for good?

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03 Apr 2016 03:08 #47142 by circes_cup
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I expect to post Chapter 9 on Thu 4/7.
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03 Apr 2016 14:20 #47147 by fats
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paulwitz wrote: @RevTekkX, is Brawna.org down and out for good?


I wouldn't hold your breath if I was you when a web-site is saying "Working on bringing back ...." for more than a week it's not likely to be coming back ever.

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03 Apr 2016 14:28 #47148 by paulwitz
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Darn. Ok, thanks Fats for the quick response.

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03 Apr 2016 19:03 #47149 by castor
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I think this is a very bueatiful story and a well crafted world. Not in a "hey look at those guns" kinda way but all the details and ideas in the world are just so well done. Love the imagery of swimming underwater in 7 and the details and concepts of this world -its just very evocative like only you can do.

As a screenwriter familiar with how people do it in movie i would say "Well how is this going to either be fucked up and they have to save it, or alternativly, this is fucked up how are they going to fix it" but in someways is it doesn't quite fit that mold. Yes its kind vaugely distopian-but you do get a sence how people in this world are kinda happy. it reminds me in a way of the first two acts of the movie Divergent- it doesn't have a lot of plot, which means it doesn't have a lot of bad plotting and cliches. But s they went on and got more and more complex..it can fell its own weight of how does this all end. Hope you can avoid that.

keep going!!!
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03 Apr 2016 23:59 - 04 Apr 2016 00:00 #47153 by RevTekkX
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I concur with Fats.

Who knows what's going on with it though? Brawna's sister site amaz0ns.com is still up.
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05 Apr 2016 16:25 #47177 by circes_cup
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castor wrote: I think this is a very bueatiful story and a well crafted world ... all the details and ideas ....


Thanks! It was certainly my intention to create an story that was immersive in nature. Some of my favorite "amazon world" stories might include Swinging by Marknew or Sally's Game by Arie. But those stories always ended in an amazon world rather than started there, never giving the characters a chance to really immerse themselves in the new reality. I wanted to write something that actually explored a different type of society, a different type of existence for men and women.

castor wrote: As a screenwriter familiar with how people do it in movie i would say "Well how is this going to either be fucked up and they have to save it, or alternativly, this is fucked up how are they going to fix it" ...


It's going to be the first one :)

Thanks again for the comments! Really enjoy hearing the details on how you reacted!

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09 Apr 2016 18:55 - 09 Apr 2016 20:26 #47231 by jnw550
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This is really a great story. I find myself wondering how I would feel in Howard's situation. From the outside looking in, Julia is the girl I fantasize about. But in a real scenario would I be okay being so effortlessly emasculated even if she means well? Howard can't even lash out physically without hurting himself against her!

Julia's discovery and naivety is adorable. In contrast, so is her physical dominance and it's obvious she's beginning to like it even a little.

I imagine inserting her in our world is going to be a true eye opener for the both of them. She's fairly commonplace in that world, but in our world she'll be a goddess.

Imagine if she were to nourish further!

Everyone wants to be a beast, until it's time to do what real beasts do.
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