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Earth Shine story
The Arions are serious about taking over Earth, through subterfuge and terror, and they're playing dirty, but thankfully Anja and Alyta and a former astronaut named Pete Conrad have something to say about that.
A Prologue and the first five chapters are up.
(Those who know the AU well will discover I've done a bit of retconning on the Supremis in this universe.)
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The Highlander wrote: Cool story, but why do all the good girls have to be blond?Everyone know that redheads are so much more interesting!
See Part 2 this Sunday. Scarlet comes into her own.
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"Oh, I wish. It totally blew up when I tried to use it to push the asteroid." You did warn she used a Californian accent... ...totally. I laughed - there were a couple other more subtle ones as well I thought. You must be listening to kids in coffee shops for dialogue hints?
I have to ask: Is this a bit of a Larry Niven homage or just happenstance? Clue 1: Nivan’el, Clue 2: Hammer of God
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Random321 wrote: Thank-you for sharing your story Shadar. It's a great read for long time fans and a good jumping in point for those who have not taken the dive into the Velorian/Arion stories. I think you mentioned you were working on something "classic" and if this was it you hit the nail on the head but also have progressed in your character work and story setup. I like the Pete character ~ and Alyta Nivan’el but she's easy to like.
"Oh, I wish. It totally blew up when I tried to use it to push the asteroid." You did warn she used a Californian accent... ...totally. I laughed - there were a couple other more subtle ones as well I thought. You must be listening to kids in coffee shops for dialogue hints?
I have to ask: Is this a bit of a Larry Niven homage or just happenstance? Clue 1: Nivan’el, Clue 2: Hammer of God
Thanks, Random. This is one of several old-timey stories I'm writing. As far as borrowing from famous authors, I get a chuckle from that. Lots of us are SF geeks here to some degree, so I figure I'd let some of that flow through. Plagiarism as homage is a thing.
I've always thought superpowers and hard science fiction were the perfect combination.
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shadar wrote: I've always thought superpowers and hard science fiction were the perfect combination.
((chuckle)) I have to agree. The elevator pitch for my tabletop RPG setting is "Tomb Raider meets Star Trek with a dash of X-Men." I think comic book-style superpowers can bring a sense of wonder even when the base tech level of the setting rises to interstellar space opera.
(And really, while Laura Croft's an utter competence-porn badass in her own right, after handling so many just-possibly-alien artifacts it's a wonder some kind of indistinguishable-from-magic mojo hasn't rubbed off on her yet. Damn near every outing she has features a McGuffin that shrieks "superheroine origin story!")
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This has become a two-arc story at this point, one arc set in the Arion camp and the other arc in the Velorian camp. Those two parallel arcs will continue for a bit until I bring them together with a crash in some future chapters.
While Velorian and Arion genetics are similar, their cultures are vastly different, and the Terrans who involve themselves with the affairs of superhumans take very different paths as well. Terrans may not have the muscles, but they still have vital roles when it comes to the future of Earth..
I have continued to include references to other stories and shows and movies and whatever when it amuses me to do so. Won't be hard to find. .
Hope you enjoy the story... I'm having more fun than I've had in a while writing this. Kind of nice to go old school on you all.
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smoki07 wrote: Sure velorian people are good guys.. However, Being Kiraling isn't a peaceful of walk lol
Either a typo or I don't understand... "Being Kiraling isn't a peaceful of walk lol"?
I will say that having (or owing) a Kiraling Obligation can be disruptive, given it comes before any other obligations. Including Alyta's mission. Owing someone your life is not taken lightly in Velorian culture.
And being "good guys" doesn't always mean doing the right thing. Especially when you are young and new in the job.
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Bull has visions of being King of Earth with a Queen beside him with dragon-fire eyes. The Arion Governor-General is all for that as he wants to use Bull as his tool to legitimize his control of Earth.
But that most definitely isn't Scarlet's plan. She wants to take a group of Primes and wipe out Earth's military and any patriots who rise to oppose them. Only her desire to protect the good name of her family is holding her back. So far.
Not only is Bull's life in jeopardy, but those of billions of Earthllings
Next week's Part Four will take place in the Velorian camp, as they try to undercut the Arions, with Alyta going directly to the President for some White House drama. Which, of course, has its share of undercover Arion agents surrounding the President. .
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Klaus wrote: Well a sitting US senator would have the correct combination of arrogance and self-delusion to believe he could control a prime.
And given the kind of man who rises to the top levels of government in most countries, a young, seductive superhuman woman offering gifts beyond a man's wildest imagination is going to be completely corrupting.
Power is corrupting enough as it is, and absolute power is absolutely corrupting, especially when that power comes from a young, sexy superhuman woman. Between their pheromones and super-sex with its gift of extreme health and vitality, the men don't have a chance.
In contrast, Anja's strategy is for her Terran agents to focus on finding the infiltrating Arions and then she'll disappear them. It's not the best strategy given that means the Vels are always behind the game. Striking after the corruption has been done.
Something Alyta will begin fixing in the next Part.
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guimachajo1 wrote: Please, I like, yo be continue. This story is avery interesante.
Please this continue
Thank you, I am working on continuing it. I've just been busy with other things and haven't had a chance to tie up loose ends and pull together a new episode. But I've been writing a little on it each day, as I have time.
Hopefully next Sunday I'll have a big episode update to release. Something worth waiting for. That's my goal.
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Great update Shadar.
By the way, is there a part 3 of this? Was trying to search it here but can't find it.
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ong76win2 wrote: Good day
Great uodate Shadar.
By the way, is there a parr 3 of this? Was trying to search it here but can't find it.
Thank you.
Glad you liked it. There is indeed a Part 3... direct link is here:
www.superwomenmania.com/index.php?option...art-three&Itemid=228
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Klaus wrote: I don't like that photo you used for Alyta. Everything else was good.
Interesting... it was my favorite photo of the group. Different strokes.
BTW... all the images of Alyta are Kate Upton, and she has some very different looks. That one caught my eye because of both the strong definition of her neck, and the more formal look, which seemed to fit the story. . Kate's been working out the last couple of years.
Here's the original photo of Kate before I tweaked it:
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Klaus wrote: Its her hair, really. More then anything else. It looks like she was attacked by birds seeking to nest in her lovely mane right before she had that photo,
My "character logic" was that that she's had lots of book learning, but she's young and this is her first real job. Her first chance to run a Mission. And everyone is tuned into Anja who has been around forever and every one loves, and they tend to dismiss Alyta as young and inexperienced. Which she is. So she tries to compensate by doing two things Vels never do:
1) She puts her hair up (which she obviously has no idea how to do and has never done in her life)
2) She covers as much of her skin as possible with clothing. (Vels always do the opposite).
She's hoping to gain respectibility and some gravitas, but she finds she's done the opposite. But I didn't fully develop that concept in the story as I should have.
Given your reaction, I'll have to reference people's reactions to her strange hair and dress in Part 5. Someone will have to tell her it sucks.
Thanks... and are you sure you weren't secretly in the audience at Camp Aurora?
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