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Dru1076 wrote: I would say the response I've had certainly qualifies as "enough interest" so the next part will be published in the library. I think the readers offended by this type of story know by now to avoid Roz. To thank you for encouraging me, all replies to this thread have been sent a link to a preview of Roz pt 2. Check your PM's. And anyine who wants a link but hasnt got one can drop me a line here or send me a PM. I will hook you up. And sorry Steelknight...but the cussing stays. It's part of the package with Roz.
I was actually talking about the gay slur
Suprising. Thats not what i think of when someone tells me they found the f word offensive. But my reply would be the same.
Its vulgar, and its deeply offensive. Thats WHY i used it. Its character appropriate, and honestly not the worst thing about this story.
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Those who read the preview I sent out will still find a pleasant surprise at the end.
Part 2, too large for a single posting on DA, had to split in two but is available there also.
www.deviantart.com/dru1076/art/Kneel-Before-Roz-2-755679133
www.deviantart.com/dru1076/art/Kneel-Before-Roz-2-5-755680162
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Love how ridiculously huge and obscenely powerful she gets and her creative use of her strength (super breath, flexing shockwaves, super spitting, the finger flick). I like how she gains literally TONS of muscle and just crushes everything with her footsteps.
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steelknight3000 wrote: Just read the rest, great stuff.
Love how ridiculously huge and obscenely powerful she gets and her creative use of her strength (super breath, flexing shockwaves, super spitting, the finger flick). I like how she gains literally TONS of muscle and just crushes everything with her footsteps.
Thanks for the feedback, mate. Roz is having a great time with her insane powers...though nobody else is. I have six more parts in the wings near ready, and wjll be rolling them out over the next month or so. Next part is ready to go, and will be in the library on the weekend.
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Dru1076 wrote: Kneel before Roz is a story I wrote a long time ago. Its about a mean super powered bully, basically. If there's enough interest, I'll clean up and post more. But i know most SWManiacs find super powered bullies distasteful, including most of my friends. So I might just privately share it with those who actually want to read it rather than put stuff in the library most people dont want to read.
Love it, love it, love it!
Such a turn-on!
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(Edit: I submitted the story...it should show up in the library soon but looks like it might be delayed a little)
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Dru1076 wrote: The next part should be up in the library today. In the meantime, it's been posted on DA. Thanks to everyone who took the time to let me know they enjoyed the first two parts. More to come.
(Edit: I submitted the story...it should show up in the library soon but looks like it might be delayed a little)
www.deviantart.com/dru1076/art/KBR3-Special-Agent-Roz-756768619
I'm really sorry, I set the timer for publication to the 01:00 PM CET, instead of the 01:00 AM CET. This shows what happens when you try to pull a double shift at work.
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WLG wrote: I do agree that we could do without the homophobic slurs, though.
I guess we could do without the entire story really. I fear I am greatly lowering the standards of fine superwomen fiction in here.
But be honest...you werent expecting Tolstoy, were you?
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SCOTT R wrote: I'm gonna cry if Roz goes away.
Never fear, mate. At this point Roz is unstoppable.
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WLG wrote: I do agree that we could do without the homophobic slurs, though.
I guess we could do without the entire story really. I fear I am greatly lowering the standards of fine superwomen fiction in here.
But be honest...you werent expecting Tolstoy, were you?
It would be tragic if you took them down because I mostly love them.. I just flinch a little at homophobic slurs (and terms like "fag" are just that whereas "pussy" isn't so there's scope for re-editing) as.i would if, for example, someone used the N word.
Apologies, Dru, I know you were only gong for a bit of realism and I absolutely believe that you had no intention of being discriminatory but that's just the way I see it.
That said, I am massively getting off on the stories!
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WLG wrote:
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WLG wrote: I do agree that we could do without the homophobic slurs, though.
I guess we could do without the entire story really. I fear I am greatly lowering the standards of fine superwomen fiction in here.
But be honest...you werent expecting Tolstoy, were you?
It would be tragic if you took them down because I mostly love them.. I just flinch a little at homophobic slurs (and terms like "fag" are just that whereas "pussy" isn't so there's scope for re-editing) as.i would if, for example, someone used the N word.
Apologies, Dru, I know you were only gong for a bit of realism and I absolutely believe that you had no intention of being discriminatory but that's just the way I see it.
That said, I am massively getting off on the stories!
Although I'm not too fond of the theme I think this is one of those rare cases where those slurs makes sense. Roz is a character that is meant to be as obnoxious and exacrable as humanly possible. It makes perfect sense that she uses this kind of slurs, simply because she already considered herself somewhat "superior" before and now her powers simply cemented this idea.
At least that's how I read her.
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WLG wrote:
iDru1076 wrote:
WLG wrote: I do agree that we could do without the homophobic slurs, though.
I guess we could do without the entire story really. I fear I am greatly lowering the standards of fine superwomen fiction in here.
But be honest...you werent expecting Tolstoy, were you?
It would be tragic if you took them down because I mostly love them.. I just flinch a little at homophobic slurs (and terms like "fag" are just that whereas "pussy" isn't so there's scope for re-editing) as.i would if, for example, someone used the N word.
Apologies, Dru, I know you were only gong for a bit of realism and I absolutely believe that you had no intention of being discriminatory but that's just the way I see it.
That said, I am massively getting off on the stories!
Although I'm not too fond of the theme I think this is one of those rare cases where those slurs makes sense. Roz is a character that is meant to be as obnoxious and exacrable as humanly possible. It makes perfect sense that she uses this kind of slurs, simply because she already considered herself somewhat "superior" before and now her powers simply cemented this idea.
At least that's how I read her.
You hit the nail on the head, really. That's really the whole point, and in the context spoken by this character it functions brilliantly. TBH...This is the last thing I expected to get negative feedback about. I have reluctantly decided to remove the term in future installments despite the fact that the replacement feels like pulling the punch a little. I'm also editing out some of the next chapter to make it more palatable.
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Sadly, homophobia exists in the real world, as does racism, sexism and i'm sure many other isms. Should we just pretend otherwise??
Despite the fact these types of stories are completely fantastical, they often only work because they are set in the real world. I don't think pretending the real world is a nicer place than it is is helpful for anyone. If we ignored characters (real or fictional) because we didn't agree with their world view, there would be very little to read about and very little worth reading.
Just my 2 cents.
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I realise that words such as fag are relatively acceptable in USA but I live in London which is a very progressive, multicultural and gay friendly city so language like that is very alien to me.
I mean, would it be okay for Roz to use the N word?
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WLG wrote: , It's not a gay slur, it's a homophobic slur. That's the problem. I am not offended by the words I just consider them to be oppressive language. I am British so I use the F Word and the C word profusely but I draw the line at oppressive language, be itracist or homophobic.
I realise that words such as fag are relatively acceptable in USA but I live in London which is a very progressive, multicultural and gay friendly city so language like that is very alien to me.
I mean, would it be okay for Roz to use the N word?
The entire point is exactly the fact that this language is not okay at all. Roz is not meant to be a sympathetic character, she's meant to be someone that the reader either fear or despise.
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Woodclaw wrote:
WLG wrote: , It's not a gay slur, it's a homophobic slur. That's the problem. I am not offended by the words I just consider them to be oppressive language. I am British so I use the F Word and the C word profusely but I draw the line at oppressive language, be itracist or homophobic.
I realise that words such as fag are relatively acceptable in USA but I live in London which is a very progressive, multicultural and gay friendly city so language like that is very alien to me.
I mean, would it be okay for Roz to use the N word?
The entire point is exactly the fact that this language is not okay at all. Roz is not meant to be a sympathetic character, she's meant to be someone that the reader either fear or despise.
This gets right to the point I made when i first responded to this concern. Roz is a villain. She isn't a hero by any stretch.
My decision to cave in on this issue is simply based on the fact l don't want to fight over something so trivial. Roz has MANY faults, but she isn't a homophobe.
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Just as it was with the N word in Alabama in the sixties, so it is with terminology like "fag" right now.
And I'm sorry but if she's using homophobic slurs then she is homophobic.
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WLG wrote: You are both missing my point. This is not about the attitudes or character flaws of a character in a story. It is about the use of terminology which contributes to the discrimination against, and oppression of, a body of people.
Just as it was with the N word in Alabama in the sixties, so it is with terminology like "fag" right now.
And I'm sorry but if she's using homophobic slurs then she is homophobic.
Okay, I can see that.
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I am not sure how I feel about being homophobic. Of all the things I would learn about myself through the creative process this is most surprising. They say you learn something everyday, and they're bloody right.
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Dru1076 wrote: I am not a homophobe. But...if I used that terrible slur then I guess I must be... Damn. I swear to god I didnt know.
I am not sure how I feel about being homophobic. Of all the things I would learn about myself through the creative process this is most surprising. They say you learn something everyday, and they're bloody right.
I don't think you are, an author is not his characters, in fact many authors are often forced to write characters that they hate and loath because the story demands it.
As far as I can tell you decided to use that slurs because they are terrible things to say and that was kind of the point of the character. I'm not saying that it's okay, just than it wasn't intentional.
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