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I agree with grayface, saw the powers coming but not the 'change'. Not usually into similar stories, but this is still well written and keeps me interested. Especially since the two main characters seem to have different views on the powers.
looking forward to how this will turn out.

*Spoiler Below*
I think more description around the computer/car scenes wouldn't hurt, felt over too fast. It also felt like a pretty harsh reaction of her even after she knew she had saved him.
But the only real thing I could complain about is that I don't really like the blog setup, nearly missed a chapter since I had to scroll past one unread to find it.

Thanks for the feedback. The reason I have this up on a blog is to post ideas as they come to me and to garner feedback before I submit it the story in finished form to this site. I tend to tell rather than show when I write. My characters need super-endurance for all the talking I put them though. So I will definitely expand the early aciton sequences. (My initial inclination was to have it all happen off-camera, and be recounted by Sara to Mark after he wakes up... )

Anyhow, the next two installments are up. This is all I have at present, so it may be a few weeks before the next installment.

Awesome updates. I don't know what more I can say, but thanks.

wow! I can't get enough of this story! please keep it coming...

thanks, this one is really good ! I love that Sara is playful and happy with her situation

Cant wait for the next installments!

Sounding good so far!

Dunnere1, Can you post your story here? Thank you

Really hoped you haven't stopped Was just getting really good!

Very cool beginning!

Haven't been any updates for a while. I sure hope you haven't stopped this little project

No worries. I have plans to finish. But I want to dedicate my full attention to it, and life has been distracting of late. And I am juggling how I want to introduce the next few plot elements without giving readers whiplash.

Look for updates in March.

Good to know. Thanks for the info.

As fate would have it, I'm home sick today, but not so sick that I couldn't work on the story.

Here's the latest installment.

Thanks for continuing to write this series. It is a great series. Be waiting for the continuation.

By the way, wish you can expound in detail what and how did they destroy the car of the couple who owned the house they went into.

Thank you.

ong76win2 wrote: Thanks for continuing to write this series. It is a great series. Be waiting for the continuation.

By the way, wish you can expound in detail what and how did they destroy the car of the couple who owned the house they went into.

Thank you.

Yeah, was it a simple fist through the engine, crushing the engine using only their super-boobs, ripped the car into multiple pieces, or something even more creative and/or kinky? Inquiring minds want to know!

jumperprime wrote: Yeah, was it a simple fist through the engine, crushing the engine using only their super-boobs, ripped the car into multiple pieces, or something even more creative and/or kinky? Inquiring minds want to know!

I really like what you are thinking Jumperprime where they would crush the engine using their super boobs and etc....

Hope he is still around. His story is great and hope for it to be continued.

Sorry to drop off the planet like that. I got stuck on the story, torn between three different directions I could go. Then, some Bad Things happened in my life, and my motivation to have a presence in any corner of the Interwebs dropped to nil. I've only been back here for a week or so.

So don't give up hope. I't may take way longer than I anticipated, but a final few chapters may be in the works.

I'm also thinking about writing some historical-themed shorts--ubergirls in places like Ancien Regime France, Industrial England, or the American West.

Dunnere1 wrote: Sorry to drop off the planet like that. I got stuck on the story, torn between three different directions I could go. Then, some Bad Things happened in my life, and my motivation to have a presence in any corner of the Interwebs dropped to nil. I've only been back here for a week or so.

So don't give up hope. I't may take way longer than I anticipated, but a final few chapters may be in the works.

I'm also thinking about writing some historical-themed shorts--ubergirls in places like Ancien Regime France, Industrial England, or the American West.

Great to hear that you are still around. Hope we can encourage you to continue writing stories and continue the stories you have started and finish them. Sorry to hear that bad things happened in your life. Hope we can help support you.

Sorry to hear you've been having problems, but I'm glad to hear you'll be back. I was wondering about that.