Fall of Superior Girl

great news

Is Monica Braun the last Ambrosia Amazon left?

The last one free at least, although she probably isn't doing so well considering she is minus an arm.

It's quiet funny or ironic that it was mention of her (ex)boyfriend which throw her into rage made considering how many time she cheated on him lol

Woodclaw wrote:

smoki07 wrote: It's quiet funny or ironic that it was mention of her (ex)boyfriend which throw her into rage made considering how many time she cheated on him lol

I think this might be a bad case of guilty conscience.

probably.I wonder if she gonna meet Mike in next chapter(s) and how will they react.

Just a quick heads up. Next chapter is likely going to be delayed another week. Windows is giving me trouble so a complete wipe and reinstall are in order (actually overdue). Don't worry, multiple backups of the story are safe online already so nothing will be lost.

Chapter 19 coming this weekend?

Do we have any idea when Chapter 19 is coming?

What? Oh, yeah....ah....yeah. That's right. (insert random George R.R. Martin meme) In all seriousness, life just got a bit in the way as it does on occasion. Should have the next chapter out this weekend.

Really enjoying this story Willow! I'm really excited to see what happens in the next chapter

Ok, Finally posted Chapter 19. Can't George R.R. Martin this any further. Just a few final touches on Chapter 20 and that is the end of this story.

I enjoyed all chapters of your Superior Girl story so far. Thanks for your hard work.

I've been following the story as well; figured I'd save my comments until the end since we're so close.

And done. The final chapter, Chapter 20, has been posted for your reading enjoyment. It was really fun writing this story. I am going to take a bit of a break from writing for a bit to recover. However, as I mentioned earlier, I have two Alternate Endings that I want to write once my vacation is over.

So now that the main story is concluded, I thought I would have some fun and upload some of my notes. As I mentioned when I first started this project, I had written a rough outline of the story. You can check this out to see how things did or did not change. I also used Hero Designer 6 from Hero Games, who make the Champions RPG game, to create some character sheets for major characters in the story. This helped give me an outline on what they could do themselves and in relation to others so I could try and remain somewhat consistent.

Fall of Superior Girl Original Outline

Character Sheet: Superior Girl

Character Sheet: Power Girl

Character Sheet: Caroline Hunter

It is funny how some people pointed out Superior Girl having blonde hair in the original story. I always imagined her having brown hair thanks to the initial image that Julie Velor used in the first chapter. It was the image of a woman with long brown hair in what looked like a sports bra on a beach with a volleyball. I don't know who the girl was, but I could never find the image on my saved archives that I grabbed from the Way Back Machine when I began the story.

Hope you all enjoyed the story. Look forward to writing a little more after my break. I still have ideas of two alternate endings, a few short story encounters, and maybe tackling the hinted tale of how Jessie Nelson escapes and becomes Nuclear Woman. Thanks to ISIKOL on DeviantArt for that final bit of last minute inspiration.

After Super Boom Boom, here is the Super Babyboom !

Great Story, I loved reading it!

Just a question, Karen (former Michelle) purchased an ISLAND! how has she such money? What is the official job?

An excellent story; thanks for all the effort you put into it. Just a few particular things that jumped out at me.

Kind of a shame to see Mike just cast by the wayside at the end. This is someone Michelle claimed to care about very much. To not even see him, let him know she's alive, and say goodbye makes me wonder whether she ever loved him at all. I suppose it's a situation where gaining superpowers makes impossible things (like flying) easy, but difficult things (like saying goodbye to a lover) are still very difficult. Probably difficult to write, too. Still, it seems like the one time she took the easy way out.

I'm surprised the alternate-universe Zod thing turned out to be true. When Michelle was researching her history, there was something about her father wanting to unite the world in peace. I really thought this would turn out to be the same Zod that everyone else saw as a conquering tyrant. He thinks he's uniting the world, to everyone else, he's taking over. Not sure how that would have integrated with the rest of the story.

Thanks for posting that outline and the other material. Fascinating to see how things changed from how you originally planned.

From Superior Girl Fall Outline:

In a fit of rage, Jessie kills Lex Luthor. She then flies down to the police waiting outside and declares herself Superior Girl, new ruler of Metropolis. The police open fire on her, and she begins demolishing them. Superman arrives to try and stop her, but is quickly defeated through Jessie's rage-filled strength.

Too bad it seems that this scene didn't make the final cut. I enjoyed the story a lot, but I really missed at least one good, detailed confrontation between Jessie and Superman.