Infinity Crisis Pt 5 -- HOT off the Press

I've enjoyed the Infinity Crisis series so far. I've only read 6 lines into this so far, and I have to say, the grammar is killing me. I will probably read it anyway, but...

I am offering to proofread anyone's story before submission. I may not be a grammar or spelling teacher, but I will get rid of common mistakes.

Back to reading.

DKC:

Nice! Though I'm not a fan of bad ubergirls as such, I've been enjoying your characterization of Natasha. The combination of immense power and an adolescent mind-set makes for some humorous situations. I got a chuckle out of Alex's line: "We're dealing with the most intelligent being in the known universe. Thankfully, she's too stupid to realize it." That captures Natasha neatly.

I do feel, however, that there's too much weird stuff going on at the Infinity Project -- time-traveling ghosts, people being turned into ducks -- which is a distraction from the main plot. Also -- I have to agree with goobers and Anon. Your prose is generally quite good, but you ought to have a beta-reader who knows the difference between "your" and "you're," "there" and "their," etc. Small things, maybe, but they can detract from the reading experience.

And I really enjoyed "The Amulet." (I'm sorry I didn't leave feedback earlier.) You came up with an original scenario -- slacker kid plus hot-lady-next-door-who-turns-out-to-be-Supergirl plus mind-control artifact -- and developed a very entertaining story from it. One of my StoryBank favorites!

Can we look forward to a new chapter of "The Project" soon? (And how about sending the existing chapters to the StoryBank for the convenience of us SWManiacs?)

Argonaut

OK, I am going to take some of the blame here as I was the beta reader.
I read the very first rough draft, but I did not send it back with any corrections. He sent the final draft to me in an HTM file I think, and I could not edit it or spell check it on my word program, so I more or less left it alone. To his credit, DKC was really trying hard to get it finished quickly as it had been so long since chapter four.

My two biggest problems were 1) work, and 2) helping with the IG commission from TGK. I will try to do better next time!

I loved the story, and I can't wait to see where it goes next. I wonder if IG will figure out that the photographer set her up by distracting her just before the bullet was fired. When she does, he best be far far away!

Thanks again to DKC for another terrific chapter of a fantastic saga.

Your not serious? My grammar is perfect. Perhaps it is You’re grammar that happens to be wrong? However, after reading there posts I will consider the possibility that they’re might happen to be right =)

Kidding aside

I don’t know whats worst…That I know the diff between there and their or that I was too lazy to correct it. In any event, as a reader, I’d feel the exact same way. I will review more closely what I submit. Thanks for bringing it to my attention.

I was half way through 7 by the time submitted 6. And 7 was a lil more fun to write. So no excuses. I had all the time in the world to take a few more looks at it. I plan to wrap infinity crisis up in 11 chapters. Maybe….Just maybe…I‘ll actually be able to finish 1 story =).

As for the Project. I told Ace I found the last chapter when I hooked up my old computer. I‘ll submit that when I get a chance to edit it….Next week or so.

Thanks again!

Ugh

And by 6 I mean 5 and by 7 I mean 6....Speaking of editing...Does anyone wanna volunteer to edit my posts before I submit them?

I do have to agree that there are problems with this chapter. I definitely did enjoy the story though. Natasha's character provides some interesting developments since she's an essentially selfish person dragooned into trying to do good and I do wonder how people will react to her somewhat more violent approach to the super game. I suspect the criminals and public will both be frightened of her.

I do look forward to the next continuation.

Great addition to the storybank. Thank you!

Great work as always DKC! Proof-read or not, awesome job. Scott

Full of win. No complaints. Already looking forward to chapter 6. Thx DKC.