Deep Down Inside

Just curious before I start: Is there any flying?

Nope, and no heat vision. I actually like that, it's a bit non-standard.

Thank you really much for this (hopefully ongoing) story. The parts you have already written were awesome. Loved the way you show the slow but steady corruption of power the girls fall victim. Hope you will continue this. I'm eager to see more. Honestly very good job, I'm eager to see more.

It was a bit too long for me, but great work on this one. One can only hope they get even stronger as the story goes on!

keep it up good job

Love seeing new stories on the site. Bravo. Could not give more encouragement.

Personally I will likely not read through it since I know that the story places a lot of emphasis on muscular characters and there is no flying. Just my personal thing. Love swimsuit to beach volleyball type physiques. Flying is of course one of my favorite traits of a Superwoman. I did read most of Chapter 1 and 2 and parts of the rest just to see where it was headed.

Thank you for posting and please continue.

Sarge395 wrote: Love seeing new stories on the site. Bravo. Could not give more encouragement.

Personally I will likely not read through it since I know that the story places a lot of emphasis on muscular characters and there is no flying. Just my personal thing. Love swimsuit to beach volleyball type physiques. Flying is of course one of my favorite traits of a Superwoman. I did read most of Chapter 1 and 2 and parts of the rest just to see where it was headed.

Thank you for posting and please continue.

I have encountered no emphasis on muscular characters. There is, however, no flying. You are half correct, anyway.

Also note that I strongly suspect, on the basis on absolutely no inside information of any kind, that there will be additional powers involved. Whether said powers ultimately include flying I couldn't say, but the gimmick of the story almost demands further use beyond what the characters currently have. Not that I object to infinitely sexy women who are super strong and invulnerable, just that there's so much more potentially possible.

Got to say well done! Great story so far! Loving it ^^, good motivation for the characters too ^^.

Can't wait to see more!

Thank you for the new parts of your story! I just love your way of thinking superwomen. The fact that these girls are well aware of their superiority is priceless, they are true goddesses and they knew it!!
I hope they will develop other superpowers like flying in the next parts and this will be the perfect story!
Thx again

SophiePortmane wrote: Thank you for the new parts of your story! I just love your way of thinking superwomen. The fact that these girls are well aware of their superiority is priceless, they are true goddesses and they knew it!!
I hope they will develop other superpowers like flying in the next parts and this will be the perfect story!
Thx again

Oh how I hope they develop other powers as well!

I hope they won't drift too far away from the moralic elements that they've encountered so far, being their own conscience that shows up when they get down and sober from a previous blood rush, and of course Jared, whos opinion seems to be very important to at least Louisa and Vicky.

Also, I'd like to see a concluding finale some day. Not that I'm bored or anything, but this story really deserves an ending that comes up to the high level of character detail and development that you have given it so far.

Thanks for the supportive comments on Parts 10-12. I've enjoyed writing this... and I'm glad to find that some of you are enjoying reading it!

We've got two more chapters coming soon, so keep an eye out for those.

Also, in addition to posting new chapters, I made some corrections to Parts 4-5. When those parts were originally posted, a formatting error deleted some important dialogue. With the dialogue reinserted, Louisa's and Kim's transformation scenes should make a lot more sense. Therefore, for those of you that enjoy getting into the detail of these stories, you may want to take another look at Parts 4-5.

DDI is one of the best uber girl stories I've ever read. Great work!

I did enjoy reading this story, which I thought was well written, though the actions of the girls did leave me feeling uncomfortable a few times. I really hope that they are able to listen to their consciences, either their own or Jared's, so that they don't take things to the extreme where they don't care if they hurt people who don't remotely deserve it. I will read to the end regardless, since a well written story is never something to be passed up.

Thanks for writing.

I really appreciate the supportive comments you all have offered so far, both in this forum and directly to me!

Whenever I sit down to write a sinigle chapter of this, four or five chapters come out. I believe my first posting (parts 1-9) was about 50,000 words, while the second posting (parts 10-14) was perhaps 30,000 words. Best I can tell, that's just my style of writing. And as you can imagine, it's really time-consuming.

Before I sit down to right another 30-to-40,000 words, it would be great to get some feedback on the direction the story is taking. Is it moving to slow or too fast? Are there some parts you like more than others? Are any pieces missing? Where do you want it to go next?

I can't guarantee that I will write something that will make everyone happy. In fact, I'm sure that whatever I do won't make everyone happy. I need to be true to my own "muse", and I'm sure that whatever I produce won't be all things to all people. But that said, I do have flexibility, and I am making choices all the time about plot direction, characters, content. It would be great to know your thoughts on what aspects of this story are working best for readers, which ones are not, and where it might go from here.

Although it is an essential part, I don't really like the scenes when they use their super strength. It was cool when they dominated the guys at basketball and threw the gas truck driver into the fire, but after that it felt too much like "l'art pour l'art", carnage for the sake of carnage. I mean, sure there are enough people who read the story just for that, but I personally don't like it too much.

On the other hand, I totally like when they conquer someone sexually. You describe that stuff unbelievably well and intense, it's just great. It sure gets repetitive (because what else shall they do; keep the guy hard and don't let him go over the edge until they had their full night of fun, until he's just begging and drooling ^^), but I love it. I guess "l'art pour l'art" applies here as well, but I don't care if it's not needed by the plot
What I don't like about this is when they put their mates into bad positions with this power. I liked when in one of the first chapters one of the girls slept with the boyfriend of that b*tch in front of her eyes, but I don't like that she's probably going to distroy the professor's marriage and endanger the librarian's job. You know, when she had him leave the important meeting by sending him her panties in an envelope. It's fine when they are playfully cruel, but sheer ruthlessness doesn't really fit them imho.

I like the pace, but I too would like to see the girls get a bit more control over the modules and the urges that are seeded by them..

I agree - its a well-written story from a fine idea. Whilst reading though, I do wonder about the mindless ruthlessness the girls tend to show at times. A touch of super-heroics, even if unintentional would be good, but hey, it's your story so take it where you want to take it.