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A Day in the Military Chapter IV
17 Jun 2013 20:29 - 17 Jun 2013 20:46 #31983
by njae
A Day in the Military Chapter IV was created by njae
Part IV
is now up, concluding the Day in the Military and making the series worthy of an own
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17 Jun 2013 21:55 #31984
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You'd think that superspeed would make me more punctual, huh?
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A reference of the outfit:
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17 Jun 2013 22:27 #31985
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thank yu Camille, great story ending !
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18 Jun 2013 04:01 #31988
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Thank you for the Chapter 4 of A Day In The Military. Great story. What will happen next? Hmmmm.....
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18 Jun 2013 20:43 #31999
by Camille Jones
You'd think that superspeed would make me more punctual, huh?
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That will be all written after I finish Origins. I tend to travel back and visit on some things I have yet to touch up/re-work before I proceed into the future.
But I appreciate the feedback so far
Any other feedback is welcomed, whether you like it or somethings I should work on better. Also, any questions are welcomed too!
But I appreciate the feedback so far

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18 Jun 2013 21:37 #32000
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Theres a nice optimism to the story. Thats the thing that struck me. You do a good job of creating a character thats feels lived in and realistic while still suggesting a kind of innocence and joy to the world.
Beyond any of the super feats kind of stuff, that whats strike me about it
It was intresting to compare it to "fragile bindings" which has a similar plotline, but is a fairly depressing story about a character with infinite power who is clearly doomed and misserable at it. Its also a good story in its own way but the contrast is stark.
keep at it is what i say:)
Beyond any of the super feats kind of stuff, that whats strike me about it
It was intresting to compare it to "fragile bindings" which has a similar plotline, but is a fairly depressing story about a character with infinite power who is clearly doomed and misserable at it. Its also a good story in its own way but the contrast is stark.
keep at it is what i say:)
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