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SGI Workshop 2.1: Vote for your favourite entry

25 Aug 2005 14:16 #2239 by YAGS
Replied by YAGS on topic Ace191
Ace,

Sorry if my criticism came off as "hostile". That really wasn't my intent. I was mostly just trying to point out that even long stories sometimes have too much material in them, which make the story longer for no real reason. Especially in this type of fiction, keeping things to the point is a good idea. Some amount of detail can be good, but there is such a thing as taking it too far, even in a longer story.

As I said in the initial post, it's only because I liked the story that I offered advice on how to improve your writing. If I thought you sucked too badly to improve, I wouldn't have bothered. :P And let's face, if any of us were too good to improve, we'd be writing professionally, not for this web site.

YAGS

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25 Aug 2005 16:04 #2241 by WhitePaw
Purrrrr.
<stretches out>

Can't scratch out a story inside 1000 words? Pppplease.

Thanks for the kind reviews, and yeah, "Go!" was a hairball.

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Can we declare LFan the winner now and move on?

I'm ready for the next one.

Love,
-White Paw

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26 Aug 2005 12:13 #2252 by marknew742
Hey guys and gals, question for you.

Being always hungry for feedback and not at all subject to ego bruising, I'm very curious about what y'all didn't like about my story, such as:

* Too little super-power action
* Nothing really happened
* Wasn't really clear what happened
* Didn't like Superlass -- cold bitch
* Didn't like Superlass -- hate red hair on supervixens
* Didn't like John because he didn't unfasten Barbie's bra quickly enough

And,
* Did you want Superlass to be MORE pissed off and MORE violent?
* Did you want Barbie to have superpowers too and to beat up John for leading her on and not coming through with the goods?

All criticism and comments happily accepted.

Great competition and congrats to Lfan!

Mark

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26 Aug 2005 14:18 #2254 by conceptfan

* Did you want Superlass to be MORE pissed off and MORE violent?
* Did you want Barbie to have superpowers too and to beat up John for leading her on and not coming through with the goods?


Goes without saying, Mark. :wink:

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26 Aug 2005 14:24 #2255 by marknew742

* Did you want Superlass to be MORE pissed off and MORE violent?
* Did you want Barbie to have superpowers too and to beat up John for leading her on and not coming through with the goods?


Goes without saying, Mark. :wink:


Yeah, but it's always fun to say it.

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26 Aug 2005 16:57 #2258 by admin
The polls are now closed. Confirmation of the final result:

In first place with 9 votes (33%), Lfan with "Call Before You Come Over"

Joint second with 5 votes (18%) goes to Marknew with "The Pick-Up" and Conceptfan with "The List"
Tied in third with 4 votes (14%) are Whitepaw with "Dropping By" and Mikey Freedom with "Revelation Night"
Last place goes to "Go", also by Whitepaw.

There were a total of 27 votes.

Thank you to all our authors for taking part. Congratulations to Lfan!

Lfan will be picking the topic for the next SGI "short" Workshop (2.2). A forum will be opened for people to suggest topics. Also, a poll is being opened to guage people's feelings about changing the maximum number of words for Workshop 2.2.


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