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20 Dec 2012 09:12 #29747 by Dunnere1
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Here's a link to story I've been working on. It involves a young man who persuades his girlfriend to try out a superhero role-playing game. However, the computer character generator they use just happens to be enchanted.

Please let me know what you think. I'll happily publish it here if resonses are good and once I have revised it to my satisfaction.
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20 Dec 2012 09:37 #29748 by Woodclaw
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The concept sound really cool.

Right now I'm a bit too busy, but I think that it might be a worthy addition to our library.

(formerly Anon, still Librarian)

"What is the point of having free will if one cannot occasionally spit in the eye of destiny?" ("Gentleman" John Marcone)

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20 Dec 2012 14:49 #29750 by pansardum
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Great story so far, one of the better I recently read.
I couldn't find any big errors, maybe some word corrections here and there nothing major.

I hope for a continuation as it really got me interested how it will go for them in the future.

This will be a great addition to the SWM library!

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20 Dec 2012 17:42 #29753 by Esteban
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It is an awesome read, and I like the format as a blog. Splits the story up into nice little packages, which makes it easier to find the point where you left off. I think it would be cool if she added healing powers to her character or make Mark durable enough for her, but not making him as godlike as she is. To me, that's a basic rule ;)

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20 Dec 2012 18:18 #29755 by Dunnere1
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I plan on going in an oddball direction, since "magical super role-playing game" just demands oddball. At the core, though, I plan on making the center of the story the contrast between the straitlaced gamer nerd Mark and the more spontaneous Sara. So, yeah, spoiler: he doesn't die. It may not be to everyone's tastes, but I hope there's enough humor, romance, and adventure to keep everyone entertained.

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21 Dec 2012 01:50 #29771 by jnw550
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Really good stuff, man! Thanks for sharing. I've added it to my watch list.

Everyone wants to be a beast, until it's time to do what real beasts do.

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21 Dec 2012 08:39 - 21 Dec 2012 08:40 #29774 by Lulu
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I really like it so far Eager to see more to come.
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21 Dec 2012 10:41 #29775 by Lastleaf
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Awesome!!!!

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23 Dec 2012 00:30 #29777 by www1969
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Terrific story, and I'm looking forward to seeing it continue (and seeing it find a home here as well). Still, I know I'm in the minority, but I don't understand why a girl can't "just" be super. You created a really interesting scenario where someone can bring to life a character from a superhero video game, but almost immediately throw out the rules (because there's this "override", don't you see...) so she's not just strong enough to lift a battleship, she's strong enough to lift a billion battleships. And able to do absolutely every other impossible thing she wants to do too. I just don't see what's added to a story by adding a bunch of zeroes to the power multiplier.

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23 Dec 2012 01:36 #29781 by deathgeonous
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This looks like it''s be a ton of fun, so please, continue!

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23 Dec 2012 02:46 #29782 by Grayface
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www1969 wrote: Terrific story, and I'm looking forward to seeing it continue (and seeing it find a home here as well). Still, I know I'm in the minority, but I don't understand why a girl can't "just" be super. You created a really interesting scenario where someone can bring to life a character from a superhero video game, but almost immediately throw out the rules (because there's this "override", don't you see...) so she's not just strong enough to lift a battleship, she's strong enough to lift a billion battleships. And able to do absolutely every other impossible thing she wants to do too. I just don't see what's added to a story by adding a bunch of zeroes to the power multiplier.



Different strokes for different folks, it as simple as that.

I can only speak for myself but I happen to like the whole way over the top power level. Again only speaking for me this is a strong sexual fetish and quite frankly this shit gets me off, the more zeros the more I get off. It’s sexual fetish, it doesn't need to make sense. It doesn't have too much to do with a story. Think of it like an old fashion porno, people don't watch them for the story, now having said that if there is a decent story so much the better.

I do wish I were better at expressing myself with the written word but whatever, I’m not trying to troll you or derail the thread so...

Dunner1 so far I like you story a lot and I’ll definitely keep looking forward to reading it.

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23 Dec 2012 04:57 - 23 Dec 2012 04:59 #29783 by www1969
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Grayface wrote: I do wish I were better at expressing myself with the written word but whatever, I’m not trying to troll you or derail the thread so...


No, dude, we're cool. I get it. I realize how ridiculous it sounds for me to want "realism" in a superheroine fantasy, it just happens to be the way I roll. The more over-the-top it is, the less I get off on it. But like you said, different strokes.
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23 Dec 2012 06:55 - 23 Dec 2012 06:57 #29784 by ChaozCloud
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CD-roms. How unrealistic, nobody uses that anymore.

Just kidding, I like it. It's quite a nice little thing you got there.
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23 Dec 2012 09:22 #29785 by Dunnere1
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I almost gave Mark a desktop. Imagine how retro that would feel! You're lucky it wan't on a 5.25" floppy. Now get off of my lawn, you kids! :P

As for power level, yeah, guilty as charged. There are also thematic reasons for doing so. I'm almost done with the next set of installments (look for them late next week). They will deal more directly with the theme of "with infinite power comes infinite responsibility...or not." In the third group of installments (which exist only in my brain right now), Mark and Sara will discover more about the makers of the CD and find that there were winners of the "Gold Edition" as well.

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23 Dec 2012 15:17 #29790 by kobarsos
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Fantastic story!!! More please!!! :)

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23 Dec 2012 15:59 #29791 by circes_cup
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Just wanted to add my voice to the chorus. Great stuff -- and lots of fun to read!! I love Sara's impish and playful side -- she is a very believable character and feels like a real person.

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28 Dec 2012 01:51 #29867 by Dunnere1
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The next two installments are up. The story takes a turn for the strange and may not be to everyone's taste, but I hope the characters and humor make up for any adverse reactions people have to the story. Suffice it to say that Sara saves Mark's life by giving him a little bit of everything she has...
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28 Dec 2012 02:26 #29868 by Grayface
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Well there I was figuring you were gonna give Mark powers. not the way you did it(i'm trying not to post spoilers) but I can say, Yes sir I like it. I'm looking forward to more.

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28 Dec 2012 04:06 #29870 by Jabbrwock
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Dunnere1 wrote: The next two installments are up. The story takes a turn for the strange and may not be to everyone's taste, but I hope the characters and humor make up for any adverse reactions people have to the story. Suffice it to say that Sara saves Mark's life by giving him a little bit of everything she has...


Personally, I like a superwoman who is secure enough in her power to not require all the men around her be puny weaklings. I mean, we have no respect for men who require the women around them to be their inferiors, I don't get why it's supposedly so awesome turn the tables.

Regardless, great story, keep it up!

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29 Dec 2012 02:02 #29884 by deathgeonous
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How did I see something like this coming? It's still fun though, so thanks.

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