I tried to post a comment at the bottom of the story, but recieved a Syntax Error on both counts. Just wanted to say this is a nice, good, promising start here!
Hey! Thanks for taking all that trouble in giving me your view about the story! Appreciate it!
I noticed that many people here prefer instant action. And although I can appreciate that too (many of my stories usually jump quickly to the action part), it is my aim to tell a story with this one. There will be plenty of action, but also a story.
The following user(s) said Thank You: lfan, Sarge395, Wotan45, Monty