Kiraling

With all the work being done on the site I'm not sure when stories are being posted. I submitted Part 33 of Kiraling on Feb. 23rd and have started Part 34.

No, it's not posted yet, it will take time I guess as site is under maintenance. Though, happy to read it soon!

Oh nice, I always look forward to another chapter of Kiraling. Especially since I think you might be working towards something that I've had an idea about for a while.

This story is absolutely awesome! Have you ever considered getting renders from wonderful artist to illustrate scenes throughout the chapters? Or will you consider it when it’s all said and done! I would love to see visual representations!

Thank you for reading!

No, getting artists rendering has never entered my mind, but I'm not opposed to it. I don't know how to go about it though.

Thinking about it, one scene that I would like to see depicted is Joe, on a hiking trail, on his knee proposing to Xara.

May I ask, what is it about the story that you like?

Well, there a lot of things tbh. I like your characterization of Joe, Xara, Kara, etc, I think him being a wounded vet recovering and managing his trauma is a very interesting perspective. He has a level of trauma has brought a level of maturity and sobriety to his view of life. I also like how the blondes came into his life and slowly changed it for the better and we see this through his actions/attitude as well as his effect on the blondes (they have changed for better in their own way i.e xara) I like the physical descriptions of the blondes powers as attributes (although I do wish they were a bit taller and bit more muscular I’m talking true Amazonians lol) I like your descriptions of their physiologies as well as their customs on their planet. Their view on sex and relationship is definitely interesting and like how you contrast that with Earth customs. I like concept of pheromones as well too lmao. I like how the blondes are power hungry and sex crazy, but genuinely good people who wish to protect the planet and the people they care about. You do a wonderful job with their humanization and think that adds level of realism to the story. It makes it feel more grounded even through you have literally powerhouses running around. Xara is by far my favorite out of the blondes and I really enjoy how direct she was in her attraction and love for Joe. It was nice to see their development, but yea I can go on and on. But yea the reason I wish their were renders to go along with the story when it’s all said and done because I think the story would greatly benefit from it. But yea in my head I think they should have been truly otherworldly I’m taking 7ft Amazons babes. That look just has you described as they would look out of this world. I would say Xara would have been 6ft ish as she was still a teen, but she turns 18 and returns on planet from her stint controlling her powers her Galen + Auroraian powers should have boasted her an additional 4-5 inch over her mother and sharon. With all them with the bodies of figure competitors muscular but not full blown open bodybuilders lol.

Talk of adding pictures did remind me of something I was thinking about recently. I don't think we ever got a proper description of the blondes, apart from tall and busty.

I have an idea that Shannon is a bit 'softer' than the others and Xara is obviously smaller and younger, but not much more than that.

Do you have any mental images of what they look like?

Well in my mind, I envision the blondes to be Amazonian in their physique. I’m talking cross between Wonder woman and she-hulk. Muscular but not overly huge lol. Think figure competitor. I was say the Kara and Sharon and fully Aurorian and I would say they should top off at 7ft. While Xara is a combination of different genes being Galean, Terran (practically inconsequential lol), and Aurorian. I say she should be around 6ft 5 when we first meet her but goes through a growth spurt after she spends sometime honing her powers on the moon to be around 7ft 5 because she has two powerful Alien races mixed in her blood which not only amplifies her powers, but should be a reflection of her enhanced physiology as well. The reason i make them so tall and a bit more muscular, because they should standout more so among Terrans. Their physical prowess should be revered as much as their beauty that not only are they intimidating sexually, but physically as well. It really highlights their physical dominance without even trying thus showing further their superiority as otherworldly beings. This would be great as it a clear juxtaposition to their actual personality as they’re rather kind and good natured beings anyways so I think that would be perfect. It also plays up into Xara goddess complex she had earlier on as she would have known she wasn’t fully mature yet and she would only get more powerful. It also plays up Kara feelings not being sincere enough when her husband got rather insecure. Not only do I think they should be Amazonian power houses because I think it’s hot lol, but it makes what Joe did in the beginning of the story THAT much more interesting and impressive! Ideally the Men and Women of their race should be around 7ft as they are superior beings to that of humans. It adds another dimension to Xara and Joes relationship as it further reinforces the idea that he may not have physically been Mr suave, but his heart and character has proved time and time again that he is worth to be their Kiraling. In my humble opinion. 

Also, I regards to adding pictures, I would suggest when you finished your story completely. Why not reach out to fellow member harmony motion, and see if you can come up with creating a definitive edition for your story. They can help create a boat load of pics for specific scenes you have in my that can carry throughout your final edition. You can workout how you want your characters to look and really bring your story to life lol. Considering how dense your story is…I would say it would be an interesting task when it said and done. Perhaps if you did do a definitive edition you would add some tidbits that would enhance the story further (like the physical description I mentioned earlier lol.) Check out harmony motions works and I’m sure it would possibly line up with a vision you would have for your characters!

My picture of the Supremis is different from yours.

The women, Kara, Sharon and Xara are all about 6 ft. tall. About means 6' to 6' 2". Joe is 5' 10", so he has to look up at all of them. Skar-El is about 6' 6" tall and looks like a Greek god. His musculature would stand out in a way that would bring to mind an Olympic gymnast, though much taller.

The women look like busty fitness models with all the feminine curves in all the right places. Their breasts are large but not porn star large. No one would look at them and think they had implants. When wearing something short, or a dress with a slit up the side, and they cross their long legs men's knees go wobbly. Their stomachs are flat . If they slightly tense their abdominal muscles their abs show with an obvious six pack. If they are completely relaxed the stomach looks flat. Here, slightly is a relative term.

When relaxed, when they aren't exerting effort, where effort is another relative term, they look like fit women who work out. Good muscle tone, but nothing that screams body builder. When their muscles are under what for them would be physical stress, they will pop out, and they will look like body builders. Picking up an M1 Abrams tank would not cause the muscles to pop out like that. Going into a dry dock and lifting a supertanker would.

BTW, I haven't explored the limits of their strength too much, it's something I should do. But Xara for certain can lift a supertanker. Not sure about Kara or Sharon.

In normal everyday life they would look strong, but not freakishly strong. When Xara lifts Joe's car so he can change the  oil her muscles show, but modestly so. When she lifts a fully loaded supertanker out of the water her muscles seem to explode.

Fair enough! You are the creator, after all! Overall, they seem like great descriptors for your characters. They really highlight their sexuality as well as their femininity, which is always a great thing! Can't complain can't complain lol. Testing the upper limits does sound like a great idea that I'm sure you will explore in the future. Cheers!

Thanks, I was thinking more about the differences in appearance between the various Supremis. I assume that while Kara, Sharon and Xara look similar they are not completely identical.

In my head Kara is particularly tall and imposing like say Uma Thurman. Attractive but not someone most people would want to mess with. Meanwhile I imagine Sharon is a bit shorter and curvier than Kara, less intimidating and more approachable. And finally Xara would be younger and thinner, relatively speaking, a bit more of a supermodel next door.

Oh and I imagine Gloria looks like Michelle Rodriguez, tough as hell!

But of course I could be completely wrong.

Well, if you ever meet them take some selfies and post them here

If you ever meet Janelle turn around and walk the other way and hope she didn't notice you looking at her.

I’ve been re-reading the series again recently and enjoying it, although John does get injured rather a lot! However something I’ve been thinking about Xara real father.

He’s half human and half Galen, which does raise two interesting questions. Firstly given that Humans and Supremes can’t have children how did a human and a Galen =11.0ptmanage, since based on Xara they would be ever stronger than any Protector. And secondly what would happen if he ever came back? Could be an interesting source of drama, and it might be nice if he turned up with a couple of buff beautiful redheaded companions , especially if they are a little bit less sex obsessed than the Velorians!

Yes, Joe does get injured a lot. That's my fault

Xara's father being half human, half Galen is from Shadar, and there was at least one story where her father made an appearance on earth and interacted with Xara. Shadar, did you write that?

As far as how a half Galen half, half human came about ... I don't know. And I don't know if Shadar wrote about how that happened either.

anonxyzus wrote:

Yes, Joe does get injured a lot. That's my fault

Xara's father being half human, half Galen is from Shadar, and there was at least one story where her father made an appearance on earth and interacted with Xara. Shadar, did you write that?

As far as how a half Galen half, half human came about ... I don't know. And I don't know if Shadar wrote about how that happened either.


 

It's been too long since I wrote about Xara and family. Don't remember. But I will say that, in the style of the great JRR Tolkien, my mythology and history changes over time as I have better ideas. 

Tolkien was always revising histories of characters and other things after publishing LOTR, which is interesting to Tolkien geeks and scholars, but the beauty of conventional publishing is that once it's out there, the revisions are just mental exercises and don't wind up in print. 

I also liked the way Josh Whedon developed Inara, the Companion in Firefly, as a high class whore who was the most civilized, kind and intelligent person in the series, and held in the very highest regard on every world they landed on. That tickled my fancy. 

The AU's continuously evolving mythology, formed by many writers, importantly Anonxyzus, has variations over time that manifest in new stories. 

As far as Velorians being too sexual, that's entirely my fault. But when your entire subspecies (Homo Sapiens Supremis) was created from ordinary Homo Sapiens for one single exclusive purpose -- Procreation with an advanced and powerful alien god-like species (whose women are all now infertile due the actions of an equally powerful enemy called the Elders) -- they are going to be really good at sex. To a fault. Every one a nymphomaniac at heart -- by genetic design. 

I've always enjoyed the fact that despite their 'narrowly designed' purpose and the Galens' genetic programming, that the Velorians have accomplished what they have. Protecting the galaxy. Founding the Enlightenment to bring freedom and self-determination to all the worlds who belong to it. Or at least, the Terran-seeded worlds. Things the Galen never envisioned for the 'tools' they had created. 

(Earth has always been iffy as to whether the Velorians are supposed to be operating here. It's supposed to be a genetic preserve that's natural and wild and untouched by Aliens -- a bit of a zoo -- in case the Galens have other ideas for things they could do with humankind.) To no surprise, Earthbound Terrans are not very fond of that idea. But you know... gods. 

Shadar